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tpo 49 Q3The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

tpo 49 Q3The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
It is true that there are many concerns with supporting charity. While many people believe that support should be provided directly to the needy in local community, other people believe that it is better to give money to charity organizations. In my opinion, both of these methods have negative and positive effects. On the one hand, the main reasons why a number of people choose to give financial support straight to the impoverished are because charity organizations are not always reliable. Some charity institutions take advantages of donor’s kindness to pocket their money by transferring a part of the donation money to the local community and keeping the remain for themselves. In Vietnam, for instance, even few state agencies called upon the donors contributing their financial to help the impoverished, but most of the budget often stayed in the pocket of the leaders of these organizations. Thus, to ensure that the poor receive full money, many donators choose to make a direct donations. On the other hand, giving money to national or international charity organizations is beneficial in some way. Firstly, charity institutions are more professional and larger in scale. When people always want to give they support as many places as they can, this method can help them send money to a lot of poverty-stricken areas or countries. These communities can help people to find jobs, build houses or find their lives back. Secondly, the size of these groups and the total number of volunteers are advantaged points because they can transport aid goods such as food, money, clothes to hard approaching places like highland, remote areas better than individuals. In conclusion, I believe that sending money directly to who in need is a practical way to help them. However, it is better and more effective by giving the donation to functional organizations.
It is true that there are
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many
concerns with supporting
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charity
. While
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many
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people
believe that support should
be provided
directly
to the needy in local community, other
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people
believe that it is better to give
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money
to
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charity
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organizations
. In my opinion, both of these methods have
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negative
and
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positive
effects.

On the one hand, the main reasons why a number of
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people
choose to give financial support straight to the impoverished are
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because
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charity
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organizations
are not always reliable.
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Some
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charity
institutions take advantages of donor’s kindness to pocket their
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money
by transferring a part of the donation
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money
to the local community and keeping
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the remain
for themselves. In Vietnam,
for instance
, even few state agencies called upon the donors contributing their financial to
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help
the impoverished,
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but
most of the budget
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often
stayed in the pocket of the leaders of these
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organizations
.
Thus
, to ensure that the poor
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receive
full
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money
,
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many
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donators
choose to
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make
a direct
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donations
.

On the other hand
, giving
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money
to national or international
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charity
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organizations
is beneficial in
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some
way.
Firstly
,
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charity
institutions are more professional and larger in scale. When
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people
always want to give they support as
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many
places as they can, this method can
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help
them
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send
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money
to
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a lot of
poverty-stricken areas or countries. These communities can
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help
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people
to find jobs, build
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houses
or find their
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lives
back.
Secondly
, the size of these groups and the total number of volunteers
are advantaged
points
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because
they can transport aid
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goods
such as food,
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money
, clothes to
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hard
approaching places like highland, remote areas better than individuals.

In conclusion
, I believe that sending
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money
directly
to who in need is a practical way to
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help
them.
However
, it is better and more effective by giving the donation to functional
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organizations
.
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IELTS essay tpo 49 Q3The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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