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The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Some organisations learn that their new human resources do not possess sufficient fundamental work etiquettes like collaboration and teamwork. This essay will highlight a few major reasons for this drawback, and furthermore, it will state few suggestions to solve such problems. Some fundamental work ethics are weak in workers because, firstly, as employees are freshers and secondly, because of their past influence and experience. Although colleges train pupil about discipline at educational institutes, they do not teach them work culture. Therefore, when freshers from colleges join work they behave as students. Furthermore, experienced workers lack such elements as they might be coming from a work environment that did not encourage them to cultivate such positive culture. For instance, NDTV reported that 2 out of 4 startups are suffering with problems related to human behaviours though their employees are technically strong. In order to overcome this problem, companies can adopt various practices. Some solutions are, employees can be enrolled to online trainings that cater to developing their skills. Moreover, HR personnel can organise team building activities, that help employees to build a stronger bond, once in a week. Another viable solution can be, collecting and delivering feedback among employees. To illustrate, economic times published that, 95% of successful companies adopted human resource consultants, who provide ideas and various ways to build a healthy work culture, among employees. In conclusion, ignorance and lack of guidance or training in the past may lead to poor soft skills in employees and corporate can seek guidance and adopt activities advised by various consulting experts to mitigate this hindrance and create better employees.
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Some
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organisations
learn that their new human resources do not possess sufficient fundamental
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work
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etiquettes
like collaboration and teamwork. This essay will highlight a few major reasons for this drawback, and
furthermore
, it will state few suggestions to solve such problems.

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Some
fundamental
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work
ethics are weak in workers
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because
,
firstly
, as
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employees
are freshers and
secondly
,
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because
of their past influence and experience. Although colleges train pupil about discipline at educational institutes, they do not teach them
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work
culture.
Therefore
, when freshers from colleges
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join
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work
they behave as students.
Furthermore
, experienced workers lack such elements as they might be coming from a
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work
environment that did not encourage them to cultivate such
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positive
culture.
For instance
,
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NDTV
reported that 2 out of 4 startups are suffering with problems related to human
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behaviours
though their
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employees
are
technically
strong.

In order to overcome this problem,
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companies
can adopt various practices.
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Some
solutions are,
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employees
can
be enrolled
to online trainings that cater to developing their
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skills
.
Moreover
, HR personnel can
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organise
team building activities, that
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help
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employees
to build a stronger bond, once in a week. Another viable solution can be, collecting and delivering feedback among
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employees
. To illustrate, economic times published that, 95% of successful
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companies
adopted human resource consultants, who provide
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ideas
and various ways to build a healthy
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work
culture, among employees.

In conclusion
, ignorance and lack of guidance or training in the past may lead to poor soft
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skills
in
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employees
and corporate can seek guidance and adopt activities advised by various consulting experts to mitigate this hindrance and create better
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employees
.
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IELTS essay The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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