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The man didn't make new friends. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why v.1

The man didn't make new friends. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why v. 1
Most foods in markets are massively purchased by people contains a range of chemical substances in order to ensure product lasts longer and tastes good. However, some people claim that food that is rich with chemicals is more dangerous than it seems. From my perspective, the potential dangers of this are greater than the benefits we receive. First and foremost, the utilizing of myriad types of chemicals is greater than ever compared to the previous century due to preserving and tasty look. Numerous product companies use chemicals to make food that last longer, thus it can stay longer on the store shelves. For example, the products that contain chemicals to prolong their life and durability have much longer shelf lives in contrast to the original food. Additionally, there are chemicals that are used to make products look impressive to the eye, and this factor also enhances the consumption of food. The rightful use of colourings improve the product to the eye. From this evidence, the fact that benefits are not for the customers, but for the company is clearly seen. Although most companies claim that their product is completely safe and does not contain harmful substances, consumers should not believe that due to the increase of food poisoning throughout the last decade. Some kinds of chemicals in food may even result in cancer and some other serious diseases that are hard to cure, therefore, people should consider everything before purchasing food that is high in harmful substances. To conclude, despite the fact there are numerous benefits of placing chemicals in food, almost all of these benefits are just for the company, conversely, carries dangers to the public. I strongly believe that disadvantages of this practice outweigh the advantages.
Most
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foods
in markets are
massively
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purchased
by
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people
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contains
a range of
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chemical
substances in order to ensure
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product
lasts
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longer
and tastes
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good
.
However
,
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some
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people
claim that
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food
that is
rich with
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chemicals
is more
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dangerous
than it seems. From my perspective, the potential
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dangers
of this are greater than the
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benefits
we receive.

First
and foremost, the utilizing of myriad types of
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chemicals
is greater than ever compared to the previous century due to preserving and tasty look. Numerous
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product
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companies
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use
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chemicals
to
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make
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food
that last
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longer
,
thus
it can stay
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longer
on the store shelves.
For example
, the
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products
that contain
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chemicals
to prolong their life and durability have much
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longer
shelf
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lives
in contrast
to the original
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food
.
Additionally
, there are
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chemicals
that are
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used
to
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make
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products
look impressive to the eye, and this factor
also
enhances the consumption of
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food
. The rightful
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use
of
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colourings
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improve
the
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product
to the eye.

From this evidence, the fact that
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benefits
are not for the customers,
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but
for the
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company
is
clearly
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seen
. Although most
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companies
claim that their
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product
is completely safe and does not contain harmful substances, consumers should not believe that due to the increase of
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food
poisoning throughout the last decade.
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Some
kinds of
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chemicals
in
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food
may even result in cancer and
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some
other serious diseases that are
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hard
to cure,
therefore
,
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people
should consider everything
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before
purchasing
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food
that is
high in harmful substances.

To conclude
, despite the fact there are numerous
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benefits
of placing
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chemicals
in
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food
, almost all of these
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benefits
are
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just
for the
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company
,
conversely
, carries
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dangers
to the public. I
strongly
believe that disadvantages of this practice outweigh the advantages.
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IELTS essay The man didn't make new friends. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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