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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they shouldn’t waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi – tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the sta v.1

The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they shouldn’t waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi – tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. with the sta v. 1
As common knowledge, libraries is open in order to provide readers with the huge collections of books. However, since the development of digital has become famous in recent years, modern public library now, also provides users hi-tech media including dvds, computers and CD-ROMs. Many people argue that library should function as it original purpose, which is, provides books rather than supplies multimedia facilities. In my point of view, I am dissent with such opinion. To begin with, hi-tech library extend the readers’ selection of materials. For instant, in the pass, doing research is limited by the number of material could be used. researchers could only peruse through traditional books, magazines or printed newspapers whereas nowadays, people can use computers to search for advance information. Not only computers but also videos or dvds are considered to be useful when student does not refer sources like newspapers or magazines. Moreover, CD-ROMs, videos or dvds are digital facilities that have an immense storage capacity. it is general knowledge that a cds can record a dramatical amount of data, at approximately from five to 15 books. Additionally, if traditional printed pages requires careful protection because paper can easily be damaged by several factors such as fire, waters or human, digital storage devices is durable. Unlike books, cds can be duplicated and restored quickly. With such advantages, these resources are more valuable than traditional printed volume as it can stored extra information, and is easily to be retrieved. In conclusion, today library has offer people with variety means of storing information. generations do not necessary depend on certain means to spread the humankind knowledge and experience anymore. This particular trend is utile, and should be nurtured.
As common knowledge, libraries is open in order to provide readers with the huge collections of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
However
, since the development of digital has become
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famous
in recent years, modern public library
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now
,
also
provides users hi-tech media including
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dvds
, computers and CD-ROMs.
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Many
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people
argue that library should function as
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it
original purpose, which is, provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
rather
than supplies multimedia facilities. In my point of view, I am dissent with such opinion.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, hi-tech library extend the readers’ selection of materials. For instant, in the pass, doing research
is limited
by the number of material could be
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used
.
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researchers
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
peruse through traditional
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books
, magazines or printed newspapers whereas nowadays,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
computers to search for advance information. Not
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only
computers
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but
also
videos or
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dvds
are considered
to be useful when student does not refer sources like newspapers or magazines.

Moreover
, CD-ROMs, videos or
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dvds
are digital facilities that have an immense storage capacity.
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it
is general knowledge that a
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cds
can record a
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dramatical
amount of data, at approximately from five to 15
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
Additionally
, if traditional printed pages requires careful protection
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
paper can
easily
be damaged
by several factors such as fire, waters or human, digital storage devices is durable. Unlike
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
,
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cds
can
be duplicated
and restored
quickly
. With such advantages, these resources are more valuable than traditional printed volume as it can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "store"
stored
extra information, and is
easily
to
be retrieved
.

In conclusion
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
library has offer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with variety means of storing information.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
generations
do not necessary depend on certain means to spread the humankind knowledge and experience anymore. This particular trend is utile, and should
be nurtured
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they shouldn’t waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi – tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. with the sta v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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