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The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.3

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
The pie charts illustrate the information about males and females in employment in 6 broad categories, divided into manual and non-manual occupation in Great Britain during 1992. In overall, men constituted a major in managerial and professional non-manual occupation; whereas, majority of women in clerical or related; however, both genders least proportion in other manual. It can be seen from the information that in non-manual occupation, a huge number of working ladies than gents were founded in clerical or related acquiring 31% and 6% respectively. In addition to this, 7% difference can be noticed in both genders ( men 36% and women 29% ) in managerial and professional field in specific nation in 1992. Interestingly, female (9%) and male (6%) attained a tiny proportion of the total percentage of other non-manual field in Great Britain From 1992. The charts further prove that in manual, a negligible change of 1% can be seen in general labourers (ladies 27% and gents 26%) and other manual (men 2% and women 1%) in both genders in particular country during 1992. Lastly, the proportion of males (24%) were 8 times more as compared to females (3%) in craft or similar occupation in Great Britain between 1992.
The pie charts illustrate the information about males and females in employment in 6 broad categories, divided into manual and non-manual
occupation
in Great Britain during 1992.

In
overall
,
men
constituted a major in managerial and professional non-manual
occupation
; whereas,
majority of
women in clerical or related;
however
, both genders
least
proportion in other manual.

It can be
seen
from the information that in non-manual
occupation
, a huge number of working ladies than gents
were founded
in clerical or related acquiring 31% and 6%
respectively
.
In addition
to this, 7% difference can
be noticed
in both genders
(
men
36% and women 29%
)
in managerial and professional field in specific nation in 1992.
Interestingly
, female (9%) and male (6%) attained a tiny proportion of the total percentage of other non-manual field in Great Britain From 1992.

The charts
further
prove that in manual, a negligible
change
of 1% can be
seen
in general
labourers
(ladies 27% and gents 26%) and other manual (
men
2% and women 1%) in both genders
in particular
country during 1992.
Lastly
, the proportion of males (24%) were 8 times more
as
compared to females (3%) in craft or similar
occupation
in Great Britain between 1992.
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IELTS essay The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

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