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The Little Ice Age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900C. E. . There were unusually harsh winters, and glaciers grew larger in many areas. Scientists have long wondered what ca v.1

The Little Ice Age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900C. E. . There were unusually harsh winters, and glaciers grew larger in many areas. Scientists have long wondered what ca v. 1
Whether parents are our best teachers or not is a controversial issue. Although many believe that teachers and society are the best teachers, I strongly believe that parents have a key role in fostering children. And I will support this view with arguments in the following paragraphs. To start with, since the babies were born, their parents have always been with them as the first teachers. They will teach them the essential knowledge that we need in order to join "the real world", such as how to speak, to walk and to interact. During the process of growing up, they learn to survive, talk, and distinguish good from bad, values of life, morality and such important other things from their parents. Additionally, parents are more engaged in their children’s activities than any other person. Sensationally, they feel closer to their offspring than any other people are. So they can find more deeply their children’s personality weaknesses and help them become finer. They always wish their children a success and they can’t have taught their kids bad things. Last but not least, parents are more devoted than the teachers. Even if parents do not specialize in education, their role in teaching the children to be aware of the need of improving their knowledge at school is tremendous. Parents are not supposed to teach their kids Math, Chemistry or Biology, but they are very much involved in giving them lessons about being independent, strong and confident in themselves. In conclusion, there is no denying that parents are the greatest mentors for their children. That is because they are the first one whom a child can follow. They care for their progeny more than anyone else and they are aware of their children features.
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do not specialize in education, their role in teaching the
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children
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much involved in giving them lessons about being independent, strong and confident in themselves.

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are the greatest mentors for their
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.
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IELTS essay The Little Ice Age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900C. E. . There were unusually harsh winters, and glaciers grew larger in many areas. Scientists have long wondered what ca v. 1

Essay
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5 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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