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TPO-27 Integrated WritingThe little ice age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900CE. There were southern harsh winters, and glaciers grew also in many areas. Scientist have lo v.2

TPO-27 Integrated WritingThe little ice age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900CE. There were southern harsh winters, and glaciers grew also in many areas. Scientist have lo v. 2
The reading and the listening are about Little Ice Age specifically what the reasons were behind this. The author of the passage suggests three possible assumptions for this harsh winters age. However, the professor in the lecture avers that the writer' s explanations were outdated and refutes all of them. First of all, the writer mentions that ocean current was one of the reasons for that natural climatic condition. He also states that since the temperature was increased prior to the Ice Age, glaciers melted and produced huge freshwater and that break down gulf current which leading the formation of the Little ice age. The professor rebuts this point by implying shreds of evidence of southern part where no such glacier melt or gulf currents disrupted. He also informs that that gulf stream was not responsible for that Age. Secondly, the author states that since volcanic eruptions produce a huge amount of dust and gas which create a sunlight block, the volcanic eruption may be the possible reason for that freezing season. However, the lecturer says that even though volcanic eruptions might be the reason of that Age, but the other consequences of eruptions were not documented by anyone. He also posits that if that occurred, the colorful sky would remain for a long time, yet such no evidence had found. So, volcanic activities were not the main reasons for that age. In the third assumption, the writer claims that population declining because of many reasons before starting the ice age might create a condition for growing forest trees. He further implies that growing large plants may absorb carbon dioxide and reduce greenhouse effect, and that helps to start that age. The professor, however, refutes this point by saying that to produce such age, must need more time. But human population regained their position and population was increased; as a result, they cut all forest trees to crop for feeding themselves. So, humans were not the reason for little ice age.
The reading and the listening are about
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Little
Ice
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Age
specifically
what the
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reasons
were behind this. The author of the passage suggests three possible assumptions for this harsh winters
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age
.
However
, the professor in the lecture avers that the
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writer&
#039; s explanations
were outdated
and refutes all of them.

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First of all
, the writer mentions that ocean
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current
was one of the
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reasons
for that natural climatic condition. He
also
states that since the temperature
was increased
prior to the Ice
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Age
, glaciers melted and produced huge freshwater and that break down gulf
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current
which leading the formation of the
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Little
ice
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age
. The professor rebuts this point by implying shreds of evidence of southern part where no such glacier melt or gulf currents disrupted. He
also
informs that that
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gulf stream
was not responsible for that Age.

Secondly
, the author states that since
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volcanic
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eruptions
produce a huge amount of dust and gas which create a sunlight block, the
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volcanic
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eruption
may be the possible
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reason
for that freezing season.
However
, the lecturer says that
even though
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volcanic
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eruptions
might be the
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reason
of that
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Age
,
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but
the other consequences of
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eruptions
were not documented by anyone. He
also
posits that if that occurred, the colorful sky would remain for a long time,
yet
such no evidence had found.
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So
,
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volcanic
activities were not the main
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reasons
for that age.

In the third assumption, the writer claims that population declining
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because
of
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many
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reasons
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before
starting the ice
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age
might create a condition for growing forest trees. He
further
implies that growing large plants may absorb carbon dioxide and
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reduce
greenhouse effect, and that
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helps
to
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start
that
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age
. The professor,
however
, refutes this point by saying that to produce such
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age
,
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must
need more time.
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But
human population regained their position and population
was increased
;
as a result
, they
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cut
all forest trees to crop for feeding themselves.
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So
, humans were not the
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reason
for
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little
ice
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age
.
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IELTS essay TPO-27 Integrated WritingThe little ice age was a period of unusually cold temperature in many parts of the world that lasted from about the year 1350 until 1900CE. There were southern harsh winters, and glaciers grew also in many areas. Scientist have lo v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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