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the line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four college library and the pie chart shows the percentage of books by type that were borrowed over this time.
The line graph depicts the number of books which were borrowed from different libraries in four distinct months. The pie chart illustrates the proportion of books in terms of genre. The most striking feature to be observed is that the highest booked were borrowed from ryslip library and fiction books were more popular. It can be vividly seen that the largest books were borrowed from ryslip and Sutton wood library at 250 to 300 per month in June. However, borrowing books from both these library were falling slowly and reached at 100 per month in August. After that it again following an increasing trend. The borrowing books from church mount and west caton library around 50 in June. After that it increased slightly and reached at 150 per month in September. Turning to rest of description, in case of borrowing books of different categories, fiction had highest 43 percent followed by biography and self help books with 19, 10 percent respectively. History and science books were equally reported with 14 percent. As far as comparison is concerned, in the June month ryslip library stood at the top but in the month of September borrowing books from Sutton wood library gain more prevalence compare to other libraries. Further, borrowing fiction books were three times more compare to other categories books.
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books
were more popular.

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that the largest
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ryslip
and Sutton wood library at 250 to 300 per
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month
in June.
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,
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from both
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were falling
slowly
and reached at 100 per
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month
in August.
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an increasing trend. The
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from church mount and west
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caton
library around 50 in June. After that it increased
slightly
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month
in September.

Turning to rest of description, in case of
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borrowing
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of
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different
categories, fiction had highest 43 percent followed by biography and self
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help
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books
with 19, 10 percent
respectively
. History and science
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books
were
equally
reported with 14 percent. As far as comparison
is concerned
, in the June
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month
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ryslip
library stood at the top
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of September
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books
from Sutton wood library gain more prevalence compare to other libraries.
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,
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fiction
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were three times more compare to other categories
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.
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IELTS essay the line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four college library and the pie chart shows the percentage of books by type that were borrowed over this time.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
219 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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