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The line graph compares the production of energy from coal in Sweden, France, Denmark and Germany between 1995 and 2010. v.1

The line graph compares the production of energy from coal in Sweden, France, Denmark and Germany between 1995 and 2010. v. 1
Most people are in favour of using animals for the study of research and science, while another group of people believes that it is inhuman to do experiments on animals in the name of research. I am of an opinion that animals cannot be used for science for some extend. This essay shall delve into both opinions. On one hand, a certain group of individuals who are against the use of animals for experiment is because animals have feelings. When animals are used for medical research, they tend to go through rigorous pain by the researchers. For example, scientists inject the poor creatures with various chemicals, which might cause the animals to lose their life. Furthermore, Individuals who are against the use of animals for experiment believes that the animals are forcefully separated from their family and friends. Scientists must be encouraged to use various simulation software for the experiments. On the other hand, there is another group of people who are in favour of doing experiments on animals because they are experimental and have similar behaviour as human. Before making the medicine available in the market for the treatment of human diseases, scientists conduct thousands of experiments on animals to ensure that the medicine does not have any side effects. For instance, animals such as monkeys and chimps are used for the experiment. In conclusion, animals are forced to go through rigorous pain when they became the culprit of research and development. Various software applications can be used to do the research in medicine and science.
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people
are in
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favour
of using
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animals
for the study of
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research
and science, while another group of
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people
believes that it is inhuman to do
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experiments
on
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animals
in the name of
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research
. I am of an opinion that
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animals
cannot be
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used
for science for
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some
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extend
. This essay shall delve into both opinions.

On one hand, a certain group of individuals who are against the
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use
of
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animals
for
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experiment
is
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because
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animals
have feelings. When
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animals
are
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used
for medical
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research
, they tend to go through rigorous pain by the researchers.
For example
, scientists inject the poor creatures with various chemicals, which might cause the
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animals
to lose their
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life
.
Furthermore
, Individuals who are against the
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use
of
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animals
for
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experiment
believes that the
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animals
are
forcefully
separated from their family and friends. Scientists
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must
be encouraged
to
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use
various simulation software for the experiments.

On the other hand
, there is another group of
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people
who are in
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favour
of doing
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experiments
on
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animals
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because
they are experimental and have similar
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behaviour
as human.
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Before
making the medicine available in the market for the treatment of human diseases, scientists conduct thousands of
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experiments
on
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animals
to ensure that the medicine does not have any side effects.
For instance
,
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animals
such as monkeys and chimps are
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used
for the experiment.

In conclusion
,
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animals
are forced
to go through rigorous pain when they became the culprit of
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research
and development. Various software applications can be
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used
to do the
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research
in medicine and science.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The line graph compares the production of energy from coal in Sweden, France, Denmark and Germany between 1995 and 2010. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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