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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.2

Since dawn of the civilization, the source of energy has been major concern for the mankind. Conventionally, fossil fuels such as coal, oil and natural gas have been being considered as prime sources in multifarious countries, while, some nations are more inclined towards renewable and eco-friendly sources: wind, tidal and solar energy. In my tenet, certainly, such practice would have good impact on the society as well as on the environment. To embark upon, the natural process of forming the conventional fuels is too slow with respect to unfettered rate of consumption of it in the present day. Hence, these sources are considered as scarce resources, which might be abolished in next few decades due to its unsustainable exploitation. Therefore, the substantial revamps done by many developed countries to motivate the utilization of non-conventional sources could be lucrative solution to fulfil unprecedented energy need of the technological world. In India, for an instance, the 85% of electricity has been generated by thermal power plants in which coal is used as a fuel. However, for last 10 years, the government is encouraging the compatriots to install solar roof top at their premises, so that the solar energy can supersede the need of energy generated by coal and the coal can be used for other imperative needs. Moreover, the carbon foot print generated by the fossil fuel has sinister effects on the environment. Momentarily, whole world is witnessing the diminishing impacts of global warming that are caused by greenhouse gases emitted during combustion of fossil fuels. To curtail this burning issue, the eco-friendly resources ought to be promoted and practiced by authorities. Although, these sources have some problem with continuity of supply, the persistent research and enhanced technology could mitigate this setback and make them reliable. For an example, many German automobile companies are indulged in the research related to optimum performance of electric cars, which would make petrol or diesel cars absolute in the public life and make travel more economical than before, and preserve the environment. To recapitulate, the utilization of renewable energy sources is the need of the hour for this modern society, as the supply of fossil fuel is limited and the eco-system is suffering from immense pollution due to convention practices. Hence, I reiterate my stand that it is lucrative a step to switch into alternative energy sources and make the earth better place to live.
Since dawn of the civilization, the
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source
of
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energy
has been major concern for the mankind.
Conventionally
,
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fossil
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fuels
such as coal, oil and natural gas have been
being considered
as prime
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sources
in multifarious countries, while,
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some
nations are more inclined towards renewable and eco-friendly
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sources
: wind, tidal and solar
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energy
. In my tenet,
certainly
, such practice would have
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good
impact on the society
as well
as on the environment.

To embark upon, the natural process of forming the conventional
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fuels
is too slow with respect to unfettered rate of consumption of it in the present day.
Hence
, these
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sources
are considered
as scarce resources, which might
be abolished
in
next
few decades due to its unsustainable exploitation.
Therefore
, the substantial revamps done by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
to motivate the utilization of non-conventional
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sources
could be lucrative solution to fulfil unprecedented
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
need of the technological world. In India, for an instance, the 85% of electricity has
been generated
by thermal power plants in which coal is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as a
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fuel
.
However
, for last 10 years, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is encouraging the compatriots to install solar
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roof top
at their premises,
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so
that the solar
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energy
can supersede the need of
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energy
generated by coal and the coal can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for other imperative needs.

Moreover
, the carbon
The noun “footprint” is spelled as one word.
foot print
generated by the
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fossil
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fuel
has sinister effects on the environment.
Momentarily
, whole world is witnessing the diminishing impacts of global warming that
are caused
by greenhouse gases emitted during combustion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
. To curtail this burning issue, the eco-friendly resources ought to
be promoted
and practiced by authorities. Although, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problem with continuity of supply, the persistent research and enhanced technology could mitigate this setback and
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make
them reliable. For an example,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
German automobile
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are indulged
in the research related to optimum performance of electric cars, which would
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make
petrol or diesel cars absolute in the public life and
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make
travel more economical than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
, and preserve the environment.

To recapitulate, the utilization of renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
is the need of the hour for this modern society, as the supply of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
is limited
and the eco-system is suffering from immense pollution due to convention practices.
Hence
, I reiterate my stand that it is lucrative a step to switch into alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
and
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make
the earth better place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) are encouraged.

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