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The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. with this opinion? v. 1
In contemporary society, relying on the internet is an integral part of human lives. Lives and financial systems have been altered by the online network; nevertheless, the planet is being turned into a worldwide community. It is indisputable that identical thoughts are shared among those within the online community. This essay will illustrate a subjective opinion that is in agreement with the given topic. It is undeniable that lives and economies have been positively changed by the online network. Furthermore, the web has become a contributing factor influencing many industries. In previous centuries, information was not delivered as simple as these days. Schools and colleges are utilizing the internet. Goods are being sold via some worldwide webs; it is not only available in particular nations, but also the oversea trade. Hence, humans derive benefits from the net, which meets the demand for convenience and variety. Nevertheless, cyberspace narrows the distance between the world and a universal village, and rapidly, everybody will express the same ideas and actions. People receive the same knowledge due to consulting similar information resources that were updated on the electronic media. It is not accidental that children believe in some videos posted, adults concern about much ridiculous online news. Besides, people are being controlled because we have a conviction that everything posted on the websites is reliable. To put it in a nutshell, although the internet brings many enormous benefits for humans, it does not mean that we let ourselves be dependent on it. We have to prevent the network from changing the world into a global village.
In contemporary society, relying on the internet is an integral part of human
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lives
.
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Lives
and financial systems have
been altered
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
network;
nevertheless
, the planet is
being turned
into a worldwide community. It is indisputable that identical thoughts
are shared
among those within the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
community. This essay will illustrate a subjective opinion
that is
in agreement with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
topic.

It is undeniable that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
and economies have been
positively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
network.
Furthermore
, the web has become a contributing factor influencing
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many
industries. In previous centuries, information was not delivered as simple as these days. Schools and colleges are utilizing the internet.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Goods
are
being sold
via
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some
worldwide webs; it is not
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only
available
in particular
nations,
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but
also
the oversea trade.
Hence
, humans derive benefits from the net, which meets the demand for convenience and variety.

Nevertheless
, cyberspace narrows the distance between the world and a universal village, and
rapidly
, everybody will express the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and actions.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
receive the same knowledge due to consulting similar information resources that
were updated
on the electronic media. It is not accidental that children believe in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
videos posted, adults concern about much ridiculous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
news.
Besides
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
being controlled
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we have a conviction that everything posted on the websites is reliable.

To put it in a nutshell, although the internet brings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
enormous benefits for humans, it does not mean that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
ourselves be dependent on it. We
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the network from changing the world into a global village.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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