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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 6
There has been an ongoing debate whether people or the government and large companies should do something to maintain the environment. Some believe that people do not have the abilty to do so and that only the goverment and organizations have the influence to do so. I disagree since i believe that individuals equally should be responsible as well as the government and companies to improve the environment. Firstly, individuals should avoid throwing garbage especially, those that are non-degradable such as, plastic, glass and metal, in areas they find convenient instead of the proper garbage bins. Otherwise it could harm the environment as well as, the animals dwelling there. For example, an elephant who died last year for unknown reason, underwent an autopsy and it's stomach was filled with plastic bags and glass pieces. Unfortunately, the reason was due to careless hurling of food to the elephant in plastic bags by tourists and throwing leftover waste into the woods. Secondly, people should start buying recycable and degradable materials like, paper or cloth bags, inorder to store their food and other goods in. In this way, people too play an important role in improving the environment. On the other hand, the ministry and many large companies should be responsible too. The government should allow and encourage people to join certain groups, that are concerned about the environment and try their best to clean and maintain waste filled areas. Moreover, industries should avoid throwing their waste into oceans, and other areas instead of disposing their waste in the proper way. For instance, the Nuwara wewa, which is a large lake in Srilanka, attracted alot of negative response in 2015 when shoals of fish started dying. It was found out that, a nearby oil industry, is responsible for this due to the dumping of nonusable oil into the lake. In conclusion, i believe that people as well as the government and large companies should make an effort to improve the environ ment by switching to recycable products and by properly dumping their wastes into trash cans or landfills.
There has been an ongoing debate whether
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people
or the
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government
and
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large
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companies
should do something to maintain the environment.
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Some
believe that
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people
do not have the
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abilty
to do
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so
and that
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only
the
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goverment
and organizations have the influence to do
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so
. I disagree since
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i
believe that individuals
equally
should be responsible
as well
as the
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government
and
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companies
to
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improve
the environment.

Firstly
, individuals should avoid throwing garbage
especially
, those that are non-degradable such as, plastic, glass and metal, in areas they find convenient
instead
of the proper garbage bins.
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Otherwise
it could harm the environment
as well
as, the animals dwelling there.
For example
, an elephant who
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died
last year for unknown reason, underwent an autopsy and it's stomach
was filled
with plastic bags and glass pieces. Unfortunately, the reason was due to careless hurling of food to the elephant in plastic bags by tourists and throwing leftover
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waste
into the woods.
Secondly
,
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people
should
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start
buying
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recycable
and degradable materials like, paper or cloth bags,
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inorder
to store their food and other
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goods
in. In this way,
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people
too play an
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important
role in improving the environment.

On the other hand
, the ministry and
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many
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large
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companies
should be responsible too. The
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government
should
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allow
and encourage
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people
to
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join
certain groups, that
are concerned
about the environment and try their best to clean and maintain
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waste
filled areas.
Moreover
, industries should avoid throwing their
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waste
into oceans, and other areas
instead
of disposing their
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waste
in the proper way.
For instance
, the
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Nuwara
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wewa
, which is a
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large
lake in
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Srilanka
, attracted
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alot
of
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negative
response in 2015 when shoals of fish
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started
dying. It
was found
out that, a nearby oil industry, is responsible for this due to the dumping of
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nonusable
oil into the lake.

In conclusion
,
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i
believe that
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people
as well
as the
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government
and
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large
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companies
should
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make
an effort to
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improve
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'environ' is correct. If 'environ' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the environ
ment by switching to
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recycable
products and by
properly
dumping their
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wastes
into trash cans or landfills.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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