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The Internet has many disadvantages as it does advantagesTo what extent do you agree with this statement? v.1

The Internet has many disadvantages as it does advantages v. 1
There is a dramatic increase in the number of people that tend to purchase a variety of products for their home. Although it is beneficial to manufacturers and the economy, I believe in the long run, it can have a negative effect on the environment. There are several advantages which can be reaped from the greater existence of household appliances, the most important of which is the economy. Once they buy many kinds of household products, they invest their effort in their families. This probably conveys a positive social message that their standard of living is higher and people can spend more time for their families, which means that they require more household equipments to use. This creates myriad consumers in the market; hence, it greatly promotes economic growth. Despite the aforementioned benefits, buying a wide range of household goods can have some downsides which are worth being considered. One of the main issues is environmental factors. The high demand of household goods is a major factor to make people use up natural resources. Some products, such as chairs or tables which are mostly made of lumber directly cause the deforestation. Due to its high profit, the number of loggers certainly is on the quick rise, which increases the risk of the ecology. In addition, when people would like to replace owned products, they will dispose wastes to the environment in large quantities. According to the last reports about the global waste of a group scientists from Havard University, household equipments topped the list of kinds of wastes and climb at a rapid speed. In conclusion, while the growth of household appliances can bring some advantages, it also poses a threat to the environment in the long run. As a result, people should control their own shopping habit in order to avoid some environmental consequences in the future.
There is a dramatic increase in the number of
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people
that tend to
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purchase
a variety of
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products
for their home. Although it is beneficial to manufacturers and the economy, I believe in the long run, it can have a
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negative
effect on the environment.

There are several advantages which can
be reaped
from the greater existence of
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household
appliances, the most
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important
of which is the economy. Once they
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buy
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many
kinds of
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household
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products
, they invest their effort in their families. This
probably
conveys a
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positive
social message that their standard of living is higher and
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people
can spend more time for their families, which means that they require more
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household
equipments to
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use
. This creates myriad consumers in the market;
hence
, it
greatly
promotes economic growth.

Despite the aforementioned benefits, buying a wide range of
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household
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goods
can have
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some
downsides which are worth
being considered
. One of the main issues is environmental factors. The high demand of
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household
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goods
is a major factor to
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make
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people
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use
up natural resources.
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Some
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products
, such as chairs or tables which are
mostly
made of lumber
directly
cause the deforestation. Due to its high profit, the number of loggers
certainly
is on the quick rise, which increases the
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risk
of the ecology.
In addition
, when
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people
would like to replace
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owned
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products
, they will dispose wastes to the environment in large quantities. According to the last reports about the global waste of a group
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scientists
from
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Havard
University,
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household
equipments topped the list of kinds of wastes and climb at a rapid speed.

In conclusion
, while the growth of
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household
appliances can bring
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some
advantages, it
also
poses a threat to the environment in the long run.
As a result
,
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people
should control their
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own
shopping habit in order to avoid
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some
environmental consequences in the future.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The Internet has many disadvantages as it does advantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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