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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v.1

The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 1
The internet is a growing hub for immediate information globally. With its expansion, knowledge is accessible for free, aided by the spread of technological devices. For the remainder of this essay I will discuss the benefits, such as its accessibility to lower socioeconomic groups and the elimination of the cost of buying books. I will also be discussing the drawbacks, namely, inaccurate information and plagiarism. Free online information has many advantages. Poorer individuals who cannot afford an education through books and universities now have options to pursue the information they need free of charge through the internet. For instance, a homeless man in my neighbor-hood learnt how to paint through YouTube, today, he is a successful high earning painter. In addition, online learning has reduced the necessity of books. Which are not easily attainable because they may be rare and expensive. For example, the world wide web has countless websites like ilovebooks. com where books are available with the click of a button free of charge. Although, there are many advantages, there are also disadvantages. With the abundance of accessible information, plagiarism is easy to commit. A study conducted by the international plagiarism society found that, there has been an 80% increase in committing the act since the immersion of the internet. In addition, another disadvantage is that knowledge online may be false or inaccurate because everyone can go online and write anything, regardless if it is true or not. An example of this is Wikipedia, anyone, even if they are not qualified to do so, may edit articles on their site. This results in the spread of incorrect information. In conclusion, there are pros and cons to the free, accessible knowledge online. In the future, I hope the internet is available for everyone globally with tighter laws on editing information online.
The internet is a growing hub for immediate
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information
globally. With its expansion, knowledge is accessible for
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free
, aided by the spread of technological devices. For the remainder of this essay I will discuss the benefits, such as its accessibility to lower socioeconomic groups and the elimination of the cost of buying
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books
. I will
also
be discussing the drawbacks,
namely
, inaccurate
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information
and plagiarism.

Free
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online
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information
has
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many
advantages. Poorer individuals who cannot afford an education through
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books
and universities
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now
have options to pursue the
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information
they need
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free
of charge through the internet.
For instance
, a homeless
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man
in my neighbor-hood
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learnt
how to paint through YouTube,
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today
, he is a successful high earning painter.
In addition
,
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online
learning has
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reduced
the necessity of
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books
. Which are not
easily
attainable
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because
they may be rare and expensive.
For example
, the
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world wide web
has countless websites like
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ilovebooks
.
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com
where
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books
are available with the click of a button
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free
of charge.

Although, there are
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many
advantages, there are
also
disadvantages. With the abundance of accessible
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information
, plagiarism is easy to commit. A study conducted by the international plagiarism society found that, there has been an 80% increase in committing the act since the immersion of the internet.
In addition
, another disadvantage is that knowledge
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online
may be false or inaccurate
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because
everyone can go
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online
and write anything, regardless if it is true or not. An example of this is Wikipedia, anyone, even if they are not qualified to do
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so
, may edit articles on their site. This results in the spread of incorrect information.

In conclusion
, there are pros and cons to the
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free
, accessible knowledge
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online
. In the future, I hope the internet is available for everyone globally with tighter laws on editing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
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online
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
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