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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. v. 1
Over the next decades, the use of books will certainly be replaced by online learning. In fact, nowadays, there are already many online resources for students to consult from anywhere around the world. In this essay I will address the two main reasons why this revolution will put an end to printed literature. Above all, almost everything can be found on the internet these days. This availability of resources is true not only from today´s newspapers and guidelines, but also for old books and magazines. For instance, if research about Roman Architecture is being done, more up-to-date resources and even drawings can be found on this topic online than in libraries. In fact, online research tends to be much easier nowadays as it has instant and great availability of resources than old libraries where books are out-of-date. In addition, portability of e-books is making online replacement of paper books come real. In other words, one can read books and study any subject from kindles, iPads, computers and cell phones. For example, Cardiology complete guidelines can be downloaded into computers or other devices and read wherever and whenever the user wants to. Therefore, undoubtedly, carrying multiple books in small electronic devices will supersede paper books because of its practicality. In conclusion, online learning availability and practicality in day to day activities will certainly make books disappear. Reading multiple books at one computer rather than carrying material to read from libraries will soon achieve the disappearance of books as we used to know.
Over the
next
decades, the
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of
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books
will
certainly
be replaced
by
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online
learning. In fact, nowadays, there are already
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many
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online
resources for students to consult from anywhere around the world. In this essay I will address the two main reasons why this revolution will put an
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end
to printed literature.

Above all
, almost everything can
be found
on the internet these days. This availability of resources is true not
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only
from
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today´s
newspapers and guidelines,
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but
also
for
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old
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books
and magazines.
For instance
, if research about Roman Architecture is
being done
, more up-to-date resources and even drawings can
be found
on this topic
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online
than in libraries. In fact,
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online
research tends to be much easier nowadays as it has instant and great availability of resources than
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old
libraries where
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books
are out-of-date.

In addition
, portability of e-books is making
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online
replacement of paper
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books
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come
real.
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In
other words, one can read
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and study any subject from kindles, iPads, computers and cell phones.
For example
, Cardiology complete guidelines can
be downloaded
into computers or other devices and read wherever and whenever the user wants to.
Therefore
,
undoubtedly
, carrying multiple
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books
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
electronic devices will supersede paper
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books
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because
of its practicality.

In conclusion
,
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online
learning availability and practicality in day to day activities will
certainly
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make
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books
disappear. Reading multiple
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books
at one computer
rather
than carrying material to read from libraries will
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soon
achieve the disappearance of
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books
as we
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used
to know.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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Grammatical Range: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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