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The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap? v.2

The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap? v. 2
In today’s world the problem of differences between well-off and poor countries is very sharp. There are some reasons which caused this problem and some measures that can be taken to reduce these issues. The inequality between rich and poor countries is a serious problem nowadays. First of all, it was caused by the system of colonies and mother countries. More developed states used to conquer poorer ones in order to gain benefit from them. They were used for getting cheap wood, coil and other resources. Those countries did not have their own industry. This stopped their development for centuries. For example, some African states used to belong to the Netherlands or Germany. However, living standards and state of economies in these two European countries is way higher that in their former colonies. Another reason is low level of education in less developed countries. Illiteracy is very common in third world countries. Sometimes schools are located in ramshackle buildings, sometimes one person teaches as many subjects as he or she can. In most of the villages children cannot go to school because there is no any. For instance, on the Maldives islands most of the locals cannot read. That is why all the important announcements are presented in pictures there, so every could understand them. No wonder people cannot improve their lives, they were never taught how it is done. However, such problems might be resolved by tacking some actions. International financial organizations should donate more to poor regions that are striving for bigger loans and implementing new technologies. What is more, some experts from rich developed countries have to be involved into process of creating efficient stabilization plans for underdeveloped nations’ economies. The problem of low education level can be resolved by sending more volunteers to destitute regions. Needless to say that charity organizations have to focus on this problem to tackle it a more effective way. Because of the fact that the process or eradication of illiteracy might take some time, charity foundations already have to be find volunteers amid youth and prepare them for hard work. The sooner these actions are taken, the better will be the results. To conclude, there are some factors which are responsible for the gap between rich and poor countries, like economic crisis or weak education. Despite that, all these problems will become possible to solve with the help of more developed countries and sympathetic individuals.
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today
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problem
of differences between well-off and
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poor
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countries
is
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very
sharp. There are
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some
reasons which caused this
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problem
and
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some
measures that can
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to
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reduce
these issues.

The inequality between rich and
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poor
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countries
is a serious
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problem
nowadays.
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First of all
, it
was caused
by the system of colonies and mother
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countries
. More
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developed
states
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used
to conquer poorer ones in order to gain benefit from them. They were
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used
for getting
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cheap
wood, coil and other resources. Those
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countries
did not have their
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own
industry. This
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stopped
their development for centuries.
For example
,
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some
African states
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used
to belong to the Netherlands or Germany.
However
, living standards and state of economies in these two European
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countries
is way higher that in their former colonies. Another reason is low level of education in less
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developed
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countries
. Illiteracy is
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very
common in third world
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countries
.
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schools
are located
in ramshackle buildings,
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sometimes
one person teaches as
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many
subjects as he or she can. In most of the villages children cannot go to school
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because
there is
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no
any.
For instance
, on the Maldives islands most of the locals cannot read.
That is
why all the
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important
announcements
are presented
in pictures there,
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so
every could understand them. No wonder
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people
cannot
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improve
their
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lives
, they were never taught how it
is done
.

However
, such
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problems
might
be resolved
by tacking
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some
actions. International financial organizations should donate more to
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poor
regions that are striving for bigger loans and implementing new technologies.
What is more
,
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some
experts from rich
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developed
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countries
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have to
be involved
into process of creating efficient stabilization plans for underdeveloped nations’ economies. The
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problem
of low education level can
be resolved
by sending more volunteers to destitute regions. Needless to say that charity organizations
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have to
focus on this
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problem
to tackle it a more effective way.
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Because of the fact that
the process or eradication of illiteracy might take
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some
time, charity foundations already
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have to
be find volunteers amid youth and prepare them for
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hard
work. The sooner these actions
are taken
, the better will be the results.

To conclude
, there are
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some
factors which are responsible for the gap between rich and
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poor
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countries
, like economic crisis or weak education. Despite that, all these
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problems
will become possible to solve with the
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help
of more
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developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
and sympathetic individuals.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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