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The important of biodiversity is being widely recognised as increasing bumbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity. v.1

The important of biodiversity is being widely recognised as increasing bumbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity. v. 1
If asked whether it is keeping a job or switching jobs that gives more job satisfaction, many would struggle to make the final choice. In my opinion, while job hopping has its own benefits, choosing a job earlier on and keeping it would provide people with a greater sense of fulfillment. On the one hand, there are several merits to job hopping. Firstly, by switching from one job to another, people have the chance to try their hands at different fields and thus ACQUIRE MORE SKILLS. Job hoppers may find JOB SATISFACTION in being able to PUT THE KNOWLEDGE GAINED FROM PREVIOUS EMPLOYMENT INTO PRACTICE at the new workplace and receiving recognition for their capabilities. Secondly, people who change work more often and experience various WORKING ENVIRONMENTS have the opportunity to find what suits them best. For example, many young people dislike the idea of having A STEADY JOB OR A DESK JOB and therefore, switch career to seek more dynamic opportunities that could later prove more fulfilling. On the other hand, there are strong reasons why holding down the same job for a long time appeals to many adults. First, people would benefit from better JOB PROSPECTS, which include PROMOTION OPPORTUNITIES and pay rises, if they stayed in a job long term. As experience and commitment are both TAKEN INTO CONSIDERATION when a company decides who to promote or to dismiss, those who work longer for an organization stand a higher chance of MOVING UP THE LADDER and EARNING A MORE LUCRATIVE LIVING. Besides, there are various perks that follow when people keep the same job, namely sick leave, HOLIDAY ENTITLEMENT, A GENEROUS RETIREMENT PACKAGE or yearly bonuses. In addition to improved job prospects, people who stay in the same job may establish a wide and steady network of partners as well as gain SUPPORTIVE LONG-TERM COLLEAGUES. In conclusion, I believe that despite the excitement that changing jobs entails, whether for people bent on PURSUING A SUCCESSFUL CAREER or for those with FEW CAREER AMBITIONS, it is staying with the same job that is more likely to bring greater job fulfillment.
If asked whether it is keeping a
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job
or switching
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jobs
that gives more
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job
satisfaction,
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many
would struggle to
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make
the final choice. In my opinion, while
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job
hopping has its
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own
benefits, choosing a
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job
earlier on and keeping it would provide
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people
with a greater sense of fulfillment.

On the one hand, there are several merits to
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job
hopping.
Firstly
, by switching from one
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job
to another,
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people
have the chance to try their hands at
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different
fields and
thus
ACQUIRE MORE
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SKILLS
.
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Job
hoppers may find
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JOB
SATISFACTION in being able to PUT THE KNOWLEDGE GAINED FROM PREVIOUS EMPLOYMENT INTO PRACTICE at the new workplace and receiving recognition for their capabilities.
Secondly
,
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people
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who
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change
work more
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often
and experience various WORKING ENVIRONMENTS have the opportunity to find what suits them best.
For example
,
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many
young
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people
dislike the
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idea
of having A STEADY
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JOB
OR A DESK
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JOB
and
therefore
, switch career to seek more dynamic opportunities that could later prove more fulfilling.

On the other hand
, there are strong reasons why holding down the same
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job
for a long time appeals to
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many
adults.
First
,
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people
would benefit from better
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JOB
PROSPECTS, which include PROMOTION OPPORTUNITIES and pay rises, if they stayed in a
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job
long term. As experience and commitment are both TAKEN INTO CONSIDERATION when a
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company
decides
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who
to promote or to dismiss, those
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who
work longer for an organization stand a higher chance of MOVING UP THE LADDER and EARNING A MORE LUCRATIVE LIVING.
Besides
, there are various perks that follow when
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people
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keep
the same
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job
,
namely
sick
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leave
, HOLIDAY ENTITLEMENT, A GENEROUS RETIREMENT PACKAGE or yearly bonuses.
In addition
to
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improved
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job
prospects,
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people
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who
stay in the same
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job
may establish a wide and steady network of partners
as well
as gain SUPPORTIVE LONG-TERM COLLEAGUES.

In conclusion
, I believe that despite the excitement that changing
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jobs
entails, whether for
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people
bent on PURSUING A SUCCESSFUL CAREER or for those with FEW CAREER AMBITIONS, it is staying with the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
that is
more likely to bring greater
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job
fulfillment.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The important of biodiversity is being widely recognised as increasing bumbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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