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choose a piec of clothing, bag, piece of jewellary or any other wearable item that you own and particularly like. Explain why you selected that item and why you like it? v.1

choose a piec of clothing, bag, piece of jewellary or any other wearable item that you own and particularly like. Explain why you selected that item and why you like it? v. 1
Nowadays, there are a huge number of students are deciding to continue further education abroad. While some drawbacks appeared when they carry out their studies activity based on this trend, I firmly believe that the benefits outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, there are some limitations for parents to allow their children to pursue their education abroad. Firstly, many of them never discharge themselves from their home and they experience the new situation. This situation makes most of them feel homesick, and due to this, it can make their study process more struggle. Fortunately, most of the prominent institutions have counseled agency for the overseas student so that they adjust themselves very well. Secondly, foreign students are more vulnerable when they have distance from family. This case makes all of them join the free society and the have a higher risk for drugs and crime. For instance, I also have a friend who quite frustrated with his activity in a foreign country and joined a banned organization. On the other hand, study abroad helps students to broaden their mental outlook towards the world as a whole. In a class, children will have various activities with students from a different country. As a result, they will learn about personality and other cultures. Furthermore, continue their education abroad make the learner have great comprehension about other country's trend and technology. Having an overseas degree provides an edge to the student in the international job market. In conclusion, I think overseas qualification not only change of employment, but also develop the mental and personality of the scholar. While there are some drawbacks occur, in my opinion, the benefits of reaching an international degree outweigh the disadvantages.
Nowadays, there are a huge number of
students
are deciding to continue
further
education
abroad
. While
some
drawbacks appeared when they carry out their studies activity based on this trend, I
firmly
believe that the benefits outweigh the demerits.

On the one hand, there are
some
limitations for parents to
allow
their children to pursue their education
abroad
.
Firstly
,
many
of them never discharge themselves from their
home and
they experience the new situation. This situation
makes
most of them feel homesick, and due to this, it can
make
their study process more struggle.
Fortunately
, most of the prominent institutions have counseled agency for the overseas
student
so
that they adjust themselves
very
well.
Secondly
, foreign
students
are more vulnerable when they have distance from family. This case
makes
all of them
join
the free society and the have a higher
risk
for drugs and crime.
For instance
, I
also
have a friend who quite frustrated with his activity in a foreign country and
joined
a banned organization.

On the other hand
, study
abroad
helps
students
to broaden their mental outlook towards the world as a whole. In a
class
, children will have various activities with
students
from a
different
country.
As a result
, they will learn about personality and other cultures.
Furthermore
, continue their education
abroad
make
the learner have great comprehension about other country's trend and technology. Having an overseas degree provides an edge to the
student
in the international job market.

In conclusion
, I
think
overseas qualification not
only
change
of employment,
but
also
develop the mental and personality of the scholar. While there are
some
drawbacks occur, in my opinion, the benefits of reaching an international degree outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay choose a piec of clothing, bag, piece of jewellary or any other wearable item that you own and particularly like. Explain why you selected that item and why you like it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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