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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree? v.8

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree? v. 8
Nowadays, online shopping has become a global phenomenon. Gone are the days when people spent their precious hours in shopping centres to search for what they need. I completely agree with the above statement and I will support my views on this subject with relevant examples. The biggest problem with shopping has been looking for the right product or fashion. This has been the biggest problem in the brick and mortar stores with limited space to showcase their products. For example, in a recent survey done in India, 75% of youth living in India believe the shops do not keep the latest fashion, whereas, 55% of youth believe that even if they find what they need, they end up not finding the right size. This is an obvious problem as the shops have to pay for every inch of space they hold and it become practically impossible to have everything under one roof. The products showcased on e-commerce can directly arrive from the source where the product is getting manufactured, so you find the latest and trendiest options to choose from and you will seldom come across a situation that you do not find your size. The second reason is convenience. In the recent book, 'The mind of the online shopper' the author did some further studies on why the online shopping world has eclipsed the regular shops. The most important insight was that 70% online shoppers buy between 9pm to 1am. To put things in perspective, they do the shopping at their convenience and that happens to be the night time, when they are done for the day and are at peace. How many shops would you find open late at night. There are some people who still prefer going to the shops to purchase, most of them would love to explore online shopping but are not able to take a step towards trying it out. Some of them tried online shopping and have been victims of late delivery or issues pertaining to returns of the product. Like the video could not kill the radio stars, shopping will always remain but drastically shrink their presence. Finding what you need, and at your own convenience are the two most important reasons why online shopping has become a global phenomenon. It will lead to the closing of many shops across the world until they find their own niche and bring something the e-commerce cannot bring to their target audience.
Nowadays,
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has become a global phenomenon. Gone
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are
the days when
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people
spent their precious hours in
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shopping
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centres
to search for what they need. I completely
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agree
with the above statement and I will support my views on this subject with relevant examples.

The biggest problem with
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shopping
has been looking for the right
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product
or fashion. This has been the biggest problem in the brick and mortar stores with limited space to showcase their
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products
.
For example
, in a recent survey done in India, 75% of youth living in India believe the
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shops
do not
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keep
the latest fashion, whereas, 55% of youth believe that even if they
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find
what they need, they
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end
up not finding the right size. This is an obvious problem as the
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shops
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have to
pay for every inch of space they hold and it
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become
practically
impossible to have everything under one roof. The
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products
showcased on e-commerce can
directly
arrive from the source where the
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product
is getting manufactured,
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so
you
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find
the latest and trendiest options to choose from and you will seldom
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come
across a situation that you do not
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find
your size.

The second reason is convenience. In the recent book, 'The mind of the
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online
shopper' the author did
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some
further
studies on why the
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online
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shopping
world has eclipsed the regular
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shops
. The most
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important
insight was that 70%
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online
shoppers
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buy
between 9pm to 1am. To put things in perspective, they do the
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shopping
at their convenience and that happens to be the
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night time
, when they
are done
for the day and are at peace. How
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many
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shops
would you
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find
open late at night.

There are
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some
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people
who
still
prefer going to the
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shops
to
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purchase
, most of them would
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love
to explore
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online
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but
are not able to take a step towards trying it out.
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Some
of them tried
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online
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and have been victims of late delivery or issues pertaining to returns of the
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product
. Like the video could not kill the radio stars,
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shopping
will always remain
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but
drastically
shrink their presence.

Finding what you need, and at your
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own
convenience are the two most
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important
reasons why
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online
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shopping
has become a global phenomenon. It will lead to the closing of
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many
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shops
across the world until they
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find
their
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own
niche and bring something the e-commerce cannot bring to their target audience.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree? v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
408 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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