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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.44

Online shopping has been increasingly trending nowadays and impacting the sales of brick and mortar stores on multiple level. There are great number of people believe the online shopping would gradually replacing the shops in majority areas. However, I disagree that online shop eventually leave no business for conventional stores to deal with, especially in the field of customer experience and delivery. Customer experience is one of the biggest obstacles for online business to tackle at the moment. The materials of products are unable to sensed and evaluated physically. Words are inapt to judging the taste of food, for example, the degree of tenderness of the meat only can be defied fairly when customer chowing the beef at the mouth. Such trial products have decisive impact on customer buying decision, whereas online shopping has nothing to offer in such experimentation. Therefore, there is long way to go before online shopping takes over stores. Apart from product experience, the hassle delivery process hinders customer to retain the product instantly. Unlike traditional store where customer can visit stores in person any time and acquire the products, shopping online requires a delivery process and product typically receive in period of time after the order has been placed. Lunch, For instance, may delivered at the time of dinner when you ordering food online. Such delaying in service inevitably lower the customer satisfaction and it is vital hindrance for intangible business to overcome. Thus, shop online is incapable to replacing stores. To summarize, customer experience and delivery time are two major concerns take into consideration in each buying decision. Unless there is big breakthrough for existing bottleneck of online shopping, it would not overwhelm stores in mass scale. However, we living in the world where technology changes our life rapid, prediction future is harder than ever and who knows sooner we can smell food from screen.
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shopping
has been
increasingly
trending nowadays and impacting the sales of brick and mortar
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stores
on multiple level. There are great number of
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people
believe the
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online
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shopping
would
gradually
replacing the shops in majority areas.
However
, I disagree that
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online
shop
eventually
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leave
no business for conventional
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stores
to deal with,
especially
in the field of
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customer
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experience
and delivery.

Customer
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experience
is one of the biggest obstacles for
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online
business to tackle at the moment. The materials of
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products
are unable to sensed and evaluated
physically
. Words are inapt to judging the taste of food,
for example
, the degree of tenderness of the meat
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only
can
be defied
fairly
when
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customer
chowing the beef at the mouth. Such trial
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products
have decisive impact on
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customer
buying decision, whereas
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online
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shopping
has nothing to offer in such experimentation.
Therefore
, there is long way to go
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before
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online
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takes over stores.

Apart from
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product
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experience
, the hassle delivery process hinders
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customer
to retain the
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product
instantly
. Unlike traditional
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store
where
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customer
can visit
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stores
in person any
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time
and acquire the
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products
,
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shopping
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online
requires a delivery process and
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product
typically
receive in period of
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time
after the order has
been placed
. Lunch,
For instance
, may delivered at the
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time
of dinner when you ordering food
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online
. Such delaying in service
inevitably
lower the
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customer
satisfaction and it is vital hindrance for intangible business to overcome.
Thus
, shop
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online
is incapable to replacing stores.

To summarize
,
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customer
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experience
and delivery
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time
are two major concerns take into consideration in each buying decision. Unless there is
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big
breakthrough for existing bottleneck of
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online
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shopping
, it would not overwhelm
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stores
in mass scale.
However
, we living in the world where technology
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changes
our life rapid, prediction future is harder than ever and who knows sooner we can smell food from screen.
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
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