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The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. v. 7
In the past decade, the violent crimes have been on the increase. This leads many people to believe that the death penalty can prove to be an effective measure to reduce criminal offences, while the other section of people believes the opposite. I agree with the foremost view. Firstly, many think that capital punishment is of no use in curbing the violence. They give arguments that no one in this world has any right to take life. Additionally, most of the time criminals are not in the right frame of mind while they are committing lawlessness, therefore they are not able to evaluate the situation correctly. Hence, instead of capital punishments they should be given a chance to reform their lives. Moreover, there have been instances where innocent have been sentenced to death. For example, in China, the innocence of a man from Beijing, was proved 18 years after his death. On the contrary, it is necessary to maintain law and order in the society else no criminal will feel fear. The strict punishments induce fear in the mind of offenders. Thus, they might think of punishment before planning and plotting of the lawlessness and can decide to refrain themselves. Furthermore, it helps in restoring faith in the judicial system. For instance, the capital punishment for the Delhi case rapists for their heinous act, will help restore faith of many in the system. In addition, this helps the government save the expenses of the criminals, which can be spent for the betterment of the nation. To conclude, death sentence might have some disadvantages, but I believe that it is the best possible way to help curb the violent and serious crime. It is a must for every nation to provide its citizens the much needed security to live peacefully.
In the past decade, the violent crimes have been on the increase. This leads
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many
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people
to believe that the death penalty can prove to be an effective measure to
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reduce
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criminal
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offences
, while the other section of
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people
believes the opposite. I
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agree
with the foremost view.

Firstly
,
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many
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think
that capital
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punishment
is of no
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use
in curbing the violence. They give arguments that no one in this world has any right to take life.
Additionally
, most of the time
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criminals
are not in the right frame of mind while they are committing lawlessness,
therefore
they are not able to evaluate the situation
correctly
.
Hence
,
instead
of capital
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punishments
they should be
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given
a chance to reform their
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lives
.
Moreover
, there have been instances where innocent have
been sentenced
to death.
For example
, in China, the innocence of a
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man
from Beijing,
was proved
18 years after his death.

On the contrary
, it is necessary to maintain law and order in the society else no
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criminal
will feel fear. The strict
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punishments
induce fear in the mind of offenders.
Thus
, they might
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think
of
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punishment
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before
planning and plotting of the lawlessness and can decide to refrain themselves.
Furthermore
, it
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helps
in restoring faith in the judicial system.
For instance
, the capital
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punishment
for the Delhi case rapists for their heinous act, will
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help
restore faith of
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many
in the system.
In addition
, this
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helps
the
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government
save the expenses of the
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criminals
, which can
be spent
for the betterment of the nation.

To conclude
, death sentence might have
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some
disadvantages,
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but
I believe that it is the best possible way to
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help
curb the violent and serious crime. It is a
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must
for every nation to provide its citizens the
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much needed
security to
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live
peacefully
.
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IELTS essay The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 9.0
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