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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.41

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 41
Due to the availability of technology, people’s life has been certainly revolutionized. This will lead to a diversity in shopping habits. Most of the people are using online shopping as having less time. However, this will lead to the reduction an innumerable of the local shops. I strongly agree with the above notion. The essay will discuss the notion with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant region for the people are preferring this mode of shopping as this will save their time. In the recent times, people having less time as their jobs are more demanding and having more time commitments. As a result, this form of shipping will be used by many people to buy their require things. Moreover, people can buy their necessary items from their home without taking much effort as no one is using the traditional methods. Although, there are many options are available with this shopping, this will be delivered in the couple of times. For example, Research conducted shows that many youngsters are preferring this trend due to the availability of items in their time with less effort. Furthermore, this mode will provide, the more discounts on the several products. As this will helps to manage the family budgets. Therefore, people over the world are using online shopping; no one likes to visit the shop and buy their products. This would be resulted in the number of local shops will be declined. For instance, the selling of the products in the local shops is decreased due to the advancement as a result, the local shops will be closed in the near future. In conclusion, Due to the advancement of the technology, the online shopping will provide comfort and efficient service. Having more benefits people prefer it over the globe. As per my opinion, this will shut down the local shop.
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Due
to the availability of technology,
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people’s
life has been
certainly
revolutionized. This will lead to a diversity in
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shopping
habits. Most of the
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people
are using online
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shopping
as
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having
less
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time
.
However
, this will lead to the reduction
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an innumerable of
the
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local
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shops
. I
strongly
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agree
with the above notion. The essay will discuss the notion with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the predominant region for the
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people
The verb 'preferring' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are preferring
this mode of
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shopping
as this will save their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. In the recent
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times
,
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people
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having
less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
as their jobs are more demanding and
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having
more
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time
commitments.
As a result
, this form of shipping will be
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used
by
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many
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people
to
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buy
their
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require
things.
Moreover
,
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people
can
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buy
their necessary items from their home without taking much effort as no one is using the traditional methods. Although, there are
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many
options are available with this
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shopping
, this will
be delivered
in the couple of
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times
.
For example
, Research conducted
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shows
that
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many
youngsters
The verb 'preferring' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are preferring
this trend
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due
to the availability of items in their
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time
with less effort.

Furthermore
, this mode will provide, the more discounts on the several products.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
this will
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helps
to manage the family budgets.
Therefore
,
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people
over the world are using online
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shopping
; no one likes to visit the
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shop
and
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buy
their products. This would
be resulted
in the number of
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local
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shops
will
be declined
.
For instance
, the selling of the products in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
is decreased
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due
to the advancement
as a result
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
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shops
will
be closed
in the near future.

In conclusion
,
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Due
to the advancement of the technology, the online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will provide comfort and efficient service.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Having
more benefits
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer it over the globe. As per my opinion, this will shut down the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 41

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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