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The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.33

The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 33
Some people believe that in the not so distant future physical shops in towns and cities would have to close down. In my opinion, I agree that this would definitely happen as recent consumer behaviour trends already point out. One major reason brick and mortar shops may soon become a thing of the past is the changes in human behaviour. People today are generally time poor. We live in a world of heavy traffic and longer working hours and as such most people do not relish the idea of going to shopping centres and having to spend several hours. For instance, a study carried out by the New York Times in 2018 showed that the number of people who shop exclusively online increased by 85% in the last decade. What this means is that physical stores are getting less traffic as their potential clients have shifted to the more convenient option of buying online. Another thing to consider is that new entrants into retail business are choosing to run their stores online as against opening physical stores. They choose this route because it reduces cost of entry considering they could run a profitable business venture right from their living room. This assertion is supported by recent studies by research organisations which have shown that with the advent of social media sites like Instagram and Facebook, a lot of businesses now run their stores solely on these sites. In other words existing stores are dwindling in number and new ones are also not springing up. To conclude, going by the recent trend in consumer shopping preferences it is certain that one day soon all physical shops in urban areas will be forced to move to online channels and ultimately close their doors.
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believe that in the not
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physical
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shops
in towns and cities would
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have to
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that this would definitely happen as recent consumer
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trends already point out.

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shops
may
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become a thing of the past is the
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changes
in human
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behaviour
.
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People
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today
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live
in a world of heavy traffic and longer working hours and as such most
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people
do not relish the
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idea
of going to shopping
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centres
and having to spend several hours.
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that the number of
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who
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shop
exclusively online increased by 85% in the last decade. What this means is that
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physical
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stores
are getting less traffic as their potential clients have shifted to the more convenient option of buying online.

Another thing to consider is that new entrants into retail business are choosing to run their
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stores
online as against opening
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physical
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stores
. They choose this route
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because
it
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reduces
cost of entry considering they could run a profitable business venture right from their living room. This assertion
is supported
by recent studies by research
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organisations
which have shown that with the advent of social media sites like Instagram and Facebook,
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a lot of
businesses
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run their
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stores
solely
on these sites.
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existing
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stores
are dwindling in number and new ones are
also
not springing up.

To conclude
, going by the recent trend in consumer shopping preferences it is certain that one day
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all
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physical
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shops
in urban areas will
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to
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move
to online channels and
ultimately
close their doors.
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IELTS essay The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 33

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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