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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.30

Online shopping has been increasingly trending nowadays and impacting the sales of brick and mortar stores on multiple level. There are great number of people believe the online shopping would gradually replacing the shops in majority areas. However, I disagree that online shop eventually leave no business for conventional stores to deal with, especially in the field of customer experience and delivery. Online shopping would not shut the tangible stores due to online shopping offers subtle customer experience on its products. The materials of products are unable to evaluated and checked physically online. For example, words cannot tell the taste of steak, the tenderness of meat unless one physically chow the beef, such trial products have great impacted on customer buying decision, whereas online shopping has nothing to offer in such pre-buy experimentation. Therefore, shop online would not replace stores. Apart from product experience, shop online cannot vanish traditional store in term of its hassle delivery process, unlike traditional store shopping where customer can physically visit the store in any business hour and purchase products, shop online requires a delivery process and product typically will received few hours after the order has been placed. For instance, lunch may delivered at the time of dinner when you ordering food online. Such service inevitably lower the customer satisfaction on service and it is mass hindrance for intangible business to overcome. Thus, shop online would not replace stores. To summarize, customer experience and delivery time are two major concerns majorly take into consideration in each buying decision. Unless there is big breakthrough for existing bottleneck of online shopping, it would not overwhelmed stores. However, we living in the world where technology changes our life in rapid pace, prediction future is harder than ever and who knows sooner we can smell yummy food from screen.
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shopping
has been
increasingly
trending nowadays and impacting the sales of brick and mortar
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stores
on multiple level. There are great number of
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people
believe the
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online
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shopping
would
gradually
replacing the
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shops
in majority areas.
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, I disagree that
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online
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shop
eventually
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leave
no business for conventional
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stores
to deal with,
especially
in the field of
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customer
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experience
and delivery.

Online
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shopping
would not shut the tangible
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stores
due to
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online
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shopping
offers subtle
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customer
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experience
on its
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products
. The materials of
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products
are unable to evaluated and
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checked
physically
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online
.
For example
, words cannot
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tell
the taste of steak, the tenderness of meat unless one
physically
chow the beef, such trial
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products
have great impacted on
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customer
buying decision, whereas
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online
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shopping
has nothing to offer in such pre-
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buy
experimentation.
Therefore
,
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shop
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online
would not replace stores.

Apart from
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product
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experience
,
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shop
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online
cannot vanish traditional
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store
in term of its hassle delivery process, unlike traditional
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store
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shopping
where
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customer
can
physically
visit the
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store
in any business hour and
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purchase
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products
,
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shop
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online
requires a delivery process and
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product
typically
will received few hours after the order has
been placed
.
For instance
, lunch may delivered at the time of dinner when you ordering food
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online
. Such service
inevitably
lower the
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customer
satisfaction on service and it is mass hindrance for intangible business to overcome.
Thus
,
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shop
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online
would not replace stores.

To summarize
,
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customer
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experience
and delivery time are two major concerns
majorly
take into consideration in each buying decision. Unless there is
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big
breakthrough for existing bottleneck of
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online
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shopping
, it would not overwhelmed
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stores
.
However
, we living in the world where technology
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changes
our life in rapid pace, prediction future is harder than ever and who knows sooner we can smell yummy food from screen.
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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