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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. \Do you agree or disagree? v.24

Internet is growing rapidly consequently its users. It is need of today’s world. People are becoming more busier and everyone want easy solutions. In my opinion, online shopping is a great way to save yours time, efforts and shop all over the world. Firstly, it’s nessary to understand the importance of online shopping and why we need it? Because of online shopping thousand of people are doing their business and earning bread and butter from it. There are millions consumer of internet. Therefore, the target customers for products sale are many. It is playing a virtual role in countries economie. If we see top ten companies in world and it is surprising to see two companies Ali express and Amazon both online platform in that list. Thus, it shows the importance and contribution of online shopping. Additionally, it help local business to grow their business. I am not against traditional way of shopping. It has its own advantages. In my point of view, if you need any thing urgent. There is only one way go to your local shop. Some people do not trust online things because of too many scams. Local business is more teustwearthy. As compare to online shopping with traditional shopping. I will say online shopping had an edge the reason behind is price, quality and time savings. At the end, I would say both are good, both had their positive and negative. We need to support local business and local business can put their for stuff online shopping in this way, you can support your local businesses and do online shopping at same time.
Internet is growing
rapidly
consequently
its users. It is
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need
of
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today
’s world.
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People
are becoming
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more busier
and everyone
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want
easy solutions. In my opinion,
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online
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shopping
is a great way to save yours time, efforts and shop all over the world.
Firstly
, it’s
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nessary
to understand the importance of
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online
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shopping
and why we
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need
it?
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Because
of
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online
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shopping
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thousand
of
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people
are doing their
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business
and earning bread and butter from it. There are millions consumer of internet.
Therefore
, the target customers for products sale are
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many
. It is playing a virtual role in countries
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economie
. If we
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see
top ten
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companies
in
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world and
it is surprising to
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see
two
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companies
Ali express and Amazon both
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online
platform in that list.
Thus
, it
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shows
the importance and contribution of
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online
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shopping
.
Additionally
, it
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help
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local
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business
to grow their
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business
. I am not against traditional way of
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shopping
. It has its
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own
advantages. In my point of view, if you
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need
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any thing
urgent. There is
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only
one way go to your
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local
shop.
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Some
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people
do not trust
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online
things
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because
of too
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many
scams.
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Local
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business
is more
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teustwearthy
.
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As
compare to
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online
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with traditional
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shopping
. I will say
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online
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shopping
had an edge the reason behind is price, quality and time savings. At the
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end
, I would say both are
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good
, both had their
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positive
and
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negative
. We
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need
to support
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local
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business
and
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local
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business
can put their for stuff
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online
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shopping
in this way, you can support your
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local
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businesses
and do
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online
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shopping
at same time.

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
268 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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