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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v.1

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 1
Enthusiasm for digital technologies is at an all time high. Owing to the trend, children these days rely on computers more than required. This essay will discuss various issues related to this transition and will propose some measures to ameliorate the situation. Pupils have started taking help of these technologies to complete their homework and projects. As a plethora of resources are available on the internet, they easily get overwhelmed by so many options are eventually getting confused. This is hampering the knowledge of the child by giving wrong information on various topics. Furthermore, it is also making juveniles lazy. As compared to older generations, who use to do deep research on a topic by going through various library books, this generation puts less effort as they find any information in just a click of a button and some students not even bother to cross check the information. For instance, some children use Wikipedia as a source of information, but it is an open source. Hence, all the information written for that platform might not be true, but children are using it and gaining wrongful data. One of the solutions to deal with such issues could be to limit the use of computers in a day. This will not only force them opt of the more reliable resources such as library books, but will also improve the intellect as will reading books, they can explore various other perspectives of a theory. Hence, parents as well as schools should encourage reading books than finding things on some websites. Secondly, books can be made more interactive, including colourful pictures, for example, so that minors can get as visually engrossed in books as they get in digital gadgets. In conclusion, with the increase in the usage of computers among the children, they are growing lazy as well as attaining a lot of irrelevant information from the unknown sources. Therefore, the use of these gadgets should be limited by educational institutes and parents and encourage them to read books and books can also be made more interesting to gain offspring interest.
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high. Owing to the trend,
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children
these days rely on computers more than required. This essay will discuss
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various
issues related to this transition and will propose
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some
measures to ameliorate the situation.

Pupils have
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started
taking
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help
of these technologies to complete their homework and projects. As a plethora of resources are available on the internet, they
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get
overwhelmed by
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so
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many
options are
eventually
getting confused. This is hampering the knowledge of the child by giving
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wrong
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information
on
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various
topics.
Furthermore
, it is
also
making juveniles lazy. As compared to older generations, who
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use to
do deep research on a topic by going through
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various
library
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books
, this generation puts less effort as they find any
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information
in
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just
a click of a button and
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check
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.
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some
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children
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information
,
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it is an open source.
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information
written for that platform might not be true,
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but
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children
are using it and gaining wrongful data.

One of the solutions to deal with such issues could be to limit the
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use
of computers in a day. This will not
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only
force them opt of the more reliable resources such as library
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books
,
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but
will
also
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improve
the intellect as will reading
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books
, they can explore
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various
other perspectives of a theory.
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, parents
as well
as schools should encourage reading
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books
than finding things on
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some
websites.
Secondly
,
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books
can
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more interactive, including
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colourful
pictures,
for example
,
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so
that minors can
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get
as
visually
engrossed in
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books
as they
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get
in digital gadgets.

In conclusion
, with the increase in the usage of computers among the
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children
, they are growing lazy
as well
as attaining
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a lot of
irrelevant
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information
from the unknown sources.
Therefore
, the
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use
of these gadgets should
be limited
by educational institutes and parents and encourage them to read
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books
and
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books
can
also
be made
more interesting to gain offspring interest.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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