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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
At the age when youngsters enrolled in school, they are at the highest level of capabilities to learn new lessons and improve academically and socially. Children's future characteristics influenced by households and teachers, which I believe, in contrast to some people's ideas, parents reverberate more significantly due to the following paragraphs. Firstly, A large body of research on attitudes indicates that parental warmth together impacts kids' behaviour, cognition, and whole aspects of life at a very early age. The moment a offspring picks up sense looks up to his parents and starts following them. Even if fathers and mothers are unaware of that impact, they are modelling their children's personalities. For instance, if a family believes in a specific religion and does its ceremonies, youths believe in that too until they grow up and decide for themselves. But, teachers do not have such an impression; therefore, the kids' main character and faiths will not be affected after they enter school. Secondly, there is a unique emotional bond between the child and the parent that cannot be compared with student and teacher relationships. Learners spend more time with their progenitors since tutors are replaced every year and do not live under the same roof as kids. Additionally, contrary to the instructors, parents do a wide variety of activities with their kids like watching television, helping the child do chores, and playing sports. As a result, educators' efficacies will not extend far beyond the classrooms; even though youngsters are more attracted to mentors in their lives. In many cases, teachers are not even influential and impressive enough to even encourage their pupils to the subject. To recapitulate, although teachers have some repercussions on students' future, like the field of study, they may choose in college, the transmission of parental values to child, concerns with their whole social, personal, and professional phases of life.
At the age when youngsters enrolled in school, they are at the highest level of capabilities to learn new lessons and
improve
academically
and
socially
. Children's future characteristics influenced by households and
teachers
, which I believe,
in contrast
to
some
people
's
ideas
,
parents
reverberate more
significantly
due to the following paragraphs.

Firstly
, A large body of research on attitudes indicates that parental warmth together impacts kids'
behaviour
, cognition, and whole aspects of life at a
very
early age. The moment
a
offspring picks up sense looks up to his
parents
and
starts
following them. Even if fathers and mothers are unaware of that impact, they are modelling their children's personalities.
For instance
, if a family believes in a specific religion and does its ceremonies, youths believe in that too until they grow up and decide for themselves.
But
,
teachers
do not have such an impression;
therefore
, the kids' main character and faiths will not be
affected
after they enter school.

Secondly
, there is a unique emotional bond between the child and the
parent
that cannot
be compared
with student and
teacher
relationships. Learners spend more time with their progenitors since tutors
are replaced
every year and do not
live
under the same roof as kids.
Additionally
, contrary to the instructors,
parents
do a wide variety of activities with their kids like watching television, helping the child do chores, and playing sports.
As a result
, educators'
efficacies
will not extend far beyond the classrooms;
even though
youngsters are more attracted to mentors in their
lives
. In
many
cases,
teachers
are not even influential and impressive
enough
to even encourage their pupils to the subject.

To recapitulate, although
teachers
have
some
repercussions on students' future, like the field of study, they may choose in college, the transmission of parental values to child, concerns with their whole social, personal, and professional phases of life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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