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The graph below shows the rate of women s literacy and population growth in selected countries from 1988 to 2000 v.1

The graph below shows the rate of women s literacy and population growth in selected countries from 1988 to 2000 v. 1
People's opinion differs as to the appropriate location for big enterprises. Consequently, some individuals believe that it is more beneficial for these companies to be relocated to smaller areas. However, I believe that the benefits of this act supersede the drawbacks because of overpopulation and pollution problems. A major disadvantage is unemployment and increased crime rate. People tend to lose their jobs when there is a relocation process and this is a major cause of depression owing to the fact that in most cases considering other factors they would not be able to move as well. More so, the crime rate rises far above usual because people lose their source of livelihood and rely on dubious means for survival. However, the plus side are numerous. To begin with, the rate of overcrowding in major cities, resulting from the presence of industries is overwhelming and it is a leading cause of the disease outbreak likely to endanger people's health, therefore, de-congesting the urban centre would mean controlling the spread. Another crucial upside is reducing pollution in the big areas which can be as a result of the industrial activities carried out in these areas. For example, if there is an oil spillage in a rural community, the danger posed would not be as much as the effect on towns. To conclude, despite varying opinions on the most suitable positioning of big firms, I am of the view that the less developed areas are the most appropriate places to position them because of overcrowding and issues arising from pollution.
People
's opinion differs as to the appropriate location for
big
enterprises.
Consequently
,
some
individuals believe that it is more beneficial for these
companies
to
be relocated
to smaller
areas
.
However
, I believe that the benefits of this act supersede the drawbacks
because
of overpopulation and pollution problems.

A major disadvantage is unemployment and increased crime rate.
People
tend to lose their jobs when there is a relocation process and this is a major cause of depression owing to the fact that
in most cases
considering other factors they would not be able to
move
as well
. More
so
, the crime rate rises far above usual
because
people
lose their source of livelihood and rely on dubious means for survival.

However
, the plus side are numerous. To
begin
with, the rate of overcrowding in major cities, resulting from the presence of industries is overwhelming and it is a leading cause of the disease outbreak likely to endanger
people
's health,
therefore
,
de-congesting
the urban
centre
would mean controlling the spread.

Another crucial upside is reducing pollution in the
big
areas
which can be
as a result
of the industrial activities carried out in these
areas
.
For example
, if there is an oil spillage in a rural community, the
danger
posed would not be as much as the effect on towns.

To conclude
, despite varying opinions on the most suitable positioning of
big
firms, I am of the view that the less developed
areas
are the most appropriate places to position them
because
of overcrowding and issues arising from pollution.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the rate of women s literacy and population growth in selected countries from 1988 to 2000 v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
7
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