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The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females using bicycles in 5 different age groups in 2011. v.1

The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females using bicycles in 5 different age groups in 2011. v. 1
Few persons believe that educational institution to provide lectures to younger people about parenting is a good idea. In my view I partially agree the statement as this a contradicts with personal thoughts. Always the perception changes from one person to another. Teaching is good for gaining the knowledge, but this fully depends on the person how he is going to learn, act and react. When I say partially agree, I have seen parents who visited the special training programs about the best parenting are doing great, noticeably they are wealthy as well. However, this kind focussed courses are not possible for all the low-in come group of society, by providing training in the school particularly for the middle-class people is a good thought. This educate the people and provide a better future for the kids best parenting. Also giving them exposure to the current trends. Furthermore, would like to discuss why I partially disagree with the statement. My friend went for the class before baby birth. They were happy and with normal behaviour until that point of time, but post completion of this class after the baby birth they changed totally. Finally, I would like to stress that good parenting needs to be taught in the institution, but the parents need to review the course and whatever is applicable to them and which ever is positive those needs to be implemented without affecting your children nature. Good parenting and kids growth are the main factors need to considered for future society.
Few persons believe that educational institution to provide lectures to younger
people
about
parenting
is a
good
idea
. In my view I
partially
agree
the statement as this a contradicts with personal thoughts.
Always
the perception
changes
from one person to another.

Teaching is
good
for gaining the knowledge,
but
this
fully
depends on the person how he is going to learn, act and react. When I say
partially
agree
, I have
seen
parents who visited the special training programs about the best
parenting
are doing great,
noticeably
they are wealthy
as well
.

However
, this kind focussed courses are not possible for all the low-in
come
group of society, by providing training in the school
particularly
for the middle-
class
people
is
a
good
thought
.
This educate
the
people
and provide a better future for the kids best
parenting
.
Also
giving them exposure to the
current
trends.

Furthermore
, would like to discuss why I
partially
disagree with the statement. My friend went for the
class
before
baby birth. They were happy and with normal
behaviour
until that point of time,
but
post completion of this
class
after the baby birth they
changed
totally
.

Finally
, I would like to
stress
that
good
parenting
needs
to
be taught
in the institution,
but
the parents
need
to review the course and whatever is applicable to them and which ever is
positive
those
needs
to
be implemented
without affecting your children nature.
Good
parenting
and kids growth are the main factors
need
to considered for future society.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females using bicycles in 5 different age groups in 2011. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
7
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