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The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades
Some universities around the world are offering their programs available online for the students on their websites. In my opinion, Online learning is always a better option in terms of flexibility and ease. However, in some cases, classroom learning would become essential. Let's begin by looking at the positive impact of online learning. Many students from different regions want a good quality of education. Some developing countries don't offer high quality of learning for this reason their students often want to study abroad. But majority of them faces expenses issue to travel. In that situation, online learning comes handy, they can take a variety of courses, their materials and guidance all at once to their desired location. Learners don't need to pack their bags, book tickets. They just got access to all the material just after paying university fee at their comfort zone. It provides reliability and ease to person in many ways. These types of courses can be taken by a student, or an office worker. Their content consists of high quality international coaching. So it's always a plus point to earn a certificate or degree with recognized educational level in your home on your laptop. However, in some cases classroom-learning becomes crucial because it improves communication skills by communicating with others. Some people argue that this type of education cannot build a person's personality. They believe that it did not help them to grow in a professional environment. Because there is no direct contact with their fellows and instructor. Often, people got trapped with fake certification sites which is widely spread around the internet. To conclude, It's always depend on person's priority to which option he might want to opt. If he is in dire need to study and cannot able to travel than distance learning is the best option but it is must to check the relevancy of the site which is offering the degree.
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on their websites. In my opinion,
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handy, they can take a variety of courses, their materials and guidance all at once to their desired location. Learners don't need to pack their bags, book tickets. They
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access to all the material
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after paying university fee at their comfort zone. It provides reliability and
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ease
to person in
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ways. These types of courses can
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, or an office worker. Their content consists of high quality international coaching.
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So
it's always a plus point to earn a certificate or degree with recognized educational level in your home on your laptop.
However
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cases classroom-learning becomes crucial
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people
argue that this type of education cannot build a person's personality. They believe that it did not
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help
them to grow in a professional environment.
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Because
there is no direct contact with their fellows and instructor.
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,
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people
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trapped with fake certification sites which is
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spread around the internet.

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learning
is the best option
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check
the relevancy of the site which is offering the degree.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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