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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale with others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale with others believe it is better to deal with them nationally 1
It is true that some people argue that the unique reason to study a foreign language is to travel to or work abroad. However, others believe that there are more reasons why people choose to learn a different language. This essay will provide both of these views before giving my opinion. Learning a foreign language is getting more important nowadays. With a continual progress of the phenomenon of the globalization, people have no choice to become a bilingual in order to get a job or have more communication abroad. First of all, many countries have accepted the idea that the international language is English, and some institute, such as universities and major companies, require a certificate of English language skills. Forcing people to learn this language sometimes without their approval. Secondly, with a trend of people to travel in other countries more often than in the past, English seems like necessary to travel in these countries where English is not spoken. For example, with a basic English language skills, every tourist could go abroad without any difficulties, making the distances of the cultures and languages much closer and creating a good relationship between tourists and local people. On the other hand, learning could be considered as a hobby for those people who want to create a contact with other countries citizens. Firstly, English could be a means of communication for those whose another language to increase their knowledge where this is not available in their country. For instance, with the widespread of the internet, all the information became available in certain websites, where are commonly in English. Thus, people from those places where there is a censorship, such as China, might have more information available regard abroad instead of having only their national news. Furthermore, through studying a language, people could understand its historical background and culture from language usage or idioms. In conclusion, Studying a foreign language has multiple reasons behind its learning. As far as I am concerned, knowing another language is not only for the jobs or travels, but for something we want to achieve for ourselves.
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choose to learn a
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language
. This essay will provide both of these views
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before
giving my opinion.

Learning a foreign
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language
is getting more
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important
nowadays. With
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a continual progress
of the phenomenon of the globalization,
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people
have no choice to become a bilingual in order to
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get
a job or have more communication
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abroad
.
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,
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have
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accepted
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idea
that the international
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language
is English, and
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some
institute, such as universities and major
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companies
, require a certificate of English
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language
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skills
. Forcing
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people
to learn this
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sometimes
without their approval.
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, with a trend of
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to
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in
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countries
more
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often
than in the past, English seems like necessary to
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travel
in these
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countries
where English is not spoken.
For example
, with a basic English
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language
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skills
, every tourist could go
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abroad
without any difficulties, making the distances of the cultures and
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languages
much closer and creating a
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good
relationship between tourists and local
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people
.

On the
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other
hand, learning could
be considered
as a hobby for those
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people
who want to create a contact with
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other
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countries
citizens.
Firstly
, English could be a means of communication for those
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whose
another
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language
to increase their knowledge where this is not available in their
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country
.
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, with
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the widespread of
the internet, all the information became available in certain websites, where are
commonly
in English.
Thus
,
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people
from those places where there is a censorship, such as China, might have more information available regard
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abroad
instead
of having
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only
their national news.
Furthermore
, through studying a
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language
,
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people
could understand its historical background and culture from
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language
usage or idioms.

In conclusion
, Studying a foreign
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language
has multiple reasons behind its learning. As far as I
am concerned
, knowing another
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language
is not
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only
for the jobs or
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travels
,
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for something we want to achieve for ourselves.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale with others believe it is better to deal with them nationally 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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