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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USAbetween 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.1

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USAbetween 1920 and 2000.
Over the years, tourism has grown into a huge industry. Actually, it is the backbone of many economies. For example, tourism is the main source of revenue for countries like Malaysia, Sri Lanka and Maldives. Some people, however, opine that tourism leads to tension between countries. While I agree with this statement to a certain extent, in my opinion, this is not a problem that cannot be resolved. Lack of understanding of cultures and traditions often leads to tension between tourists and locals. For example, most countries in the Middle East and South East Asia are conservative by nature. Middle Eastern countries in particular have strict codes of conduct and dressing. When tourists, especially those from the liberal West visit these countries's problems often arise. Locals expect the foreign visitors to follow their customs and traditions. Often times, the visitors simply do not care. There have even been many cases where the locals attacked tourists for disrespecting their culture. In the end, such unfortunate incidents lead to problems between the two countries. Hence, the argument that tourism leads to tension between countries certainly holds some water. Even so, in my opinion, tourism also fosters understanding. Actually, this tension can be diffused by simply promoting a culture of understanding. Countries that receive a lot of international tourists should take the moral responsibility to teach their citizens about cultural differences. Locals should be taught that they cannot expect a foreigner to behave like them or to respect their customs as they do. At the same time, countries that send a lot of tourists to other countries should also sensitize their people about the importance of respecting the culture and traditions of the country they visit. These simple measures will solve most of the problems associated with tourism. To conclude, tourism may create tension between countries when there is a lack of understanding about culture and traditions. However, nations can combat this issue by inculcating an attitude of tolerance and understanding in their citizens.
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tourism
has grown into a huge industry. Actually, it is the backbone of
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many
economies.
For example
,
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tourism
is the main source of revenue for
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countries
like Malaysia, Sri Lanka and Maldives.
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people
,
however
, opine that
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tourism
leads to
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tension
between
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countries
. While I
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agree
with this statement to a certain extent, in my opinion, this is not a
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problem
that cannot
be resolved
.

Lack of
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understanding
of
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cultures
and
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traditions
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often
leads to
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tension
between
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tourists
and
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locals
.
For example
, most
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countries
in the Middle East and South East Asia are conservative by nature. Middle Eastern
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countries
in particular
have strict codes of conduct and dressing. When
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tourists
,
especially
those from the liberal West visit these
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countries's
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problems
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often
arise.
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Locals
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expect
the foreign visitors to follow their customs and
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traditions
.
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times, the visitors
simply
do not care. There have even been
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many
cases where the
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locals
attacked
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tourists
for disrespecting their
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culture
. In the
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end
, such unfortunate incidents
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lead
to
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problems
between the two
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countries
.
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, the argument that
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tourism
leads to
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tension
between
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countries
certainly
holds
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water.

Even
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so
, in my opinion,
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tourism
also
fosters
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understanding
. Actually, this
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tension
can
be diffused
by
simply
promoting a
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culture
of
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understanding
.
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Countries
that receive
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a lot of
international
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tourists
should take the moral responsibility to teach their citizens about cultural differences.
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Locals
should
be taught
that they cannot
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expect
a foreigner to behave like them or to respect their customs as they do. At the same time,
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countries
that
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send
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a lot of
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tourists
to other
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countries
should
also
sensitize their
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people
about the importance of respecting the
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culture
and
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traditions
of the
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country
they visit. These simple measures will solve most of the
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problems
associated with tourism.

To conclude
,
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tourism
may create
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tension
between
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countries
when there is a lack of
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understanding
about
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culture
and
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traditions
.
However
, nations can combat this issue by inculcating an attitude of tolerance and
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understanding
in their citizens.
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IELTS essay The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USAbetween 1920 and 2000.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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