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What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v.2

What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2
All students should learn foreign language as soon as they get admission in school, However it seems that it an impractical aspiration, no matter how much we might admire this idea. The main obstacle comes from the school teachers, if the students are not yet mentally prepared, this will significantly affect them while learning a new language. Although it is good to learn a foreign terminology, but for the students it will be overwhelmingly extra burden on them, these painful lessons shown by the states such as middle east countries, seem to demonstrate learning a foreign language is intolerably difficult for them. A further issue relates to "age factor" of children, youngsters who are juvenile seems to be much more focused on their parents, as their interest lies elsewhere. Another significant factor is that students show their interest in playing games, rather than in studies. One final point against this is, students should be nourished, pampered by parents and as well as teachers to overcome the fear till they start to go to the academy and this will surely help them. While it may be correct that foreign languages gives an extra advantage to students, as they opt out for foreign countries for higher studies, work or settling there but it still appears to be the case that it is not necessary as it will impact child development. These needs to be adopted for other means such as, after finishing their high school administration should make compulsory for every student to acquire knowledge of foreign terminology. To summarise, it seems that foreign languages do provide a skill to a person, however, due to child capability & his willingness to learn will play a major role in this.
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language
. Although it is
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good
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foreign
terminology,
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students
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middle east
countries,
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language
is
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of children, youngsters who are juvenile
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students
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show
their interest in playing games,
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than in studies. One final point against this is,
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students
should
be nourished
, pampered by parents and
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start
to go to the academy and this will
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foreign
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languages
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students
, as they opt out for
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foreign
countries for higher studies, work or settling there
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but
it
still
appears to be the case that it is not necessary as it will impact child development. These needs to
be adopted
for other means such as, after finishing their high school administration should
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compulsory for every
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student
to acquire knowledge of
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terminology.

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do provide a
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skill
to a person,
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, due to child capability & his willingness to learn will play a major role in this.
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IELTS essay What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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