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the government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during the rush hour to help cut down on air pollution from exhausting fumes v.2

the government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during the rush hour to help cut down on air pollution from exhausting fumes v. 2
It is a common belief that drivers should not be charged when using their vehicles at the rush hour, even though it brings many harm to environment. However, I firmly believe that imposing fee would do a lot of benefits because it can cut the number of vehicles drives on the street and protect the environment To begin with, implementing a rush hour fee would ease the traffic jam, diminishing some of pollution in the atmosphere. Charge will cut the personal cars. Instead, they would opt to use the alternatives means of transportation. This is important because being stuck in traffic also adds appreciably to the emission of pollutants, Moreover, enforcing a fee is not only simple, but it works well. For instance, in some countries, the government introduced this fee several years ago. As a result, the residents started to share their car with each others, walk and public transports as well. Going down on the number of vehicles drives on the street at rush hour make the congestion, accidents in traffic also be down, and pollution levels have gone down as well. On the top of that, Tax revenue from the rush hour can be used to fund of environmental or social projects. Prohibition can use this charge for improving the green environment. For example, government has been able to plant trees and flower alongside road or improve the jungles after deforestation. Not only the beauty of the landscape has been increased, but the quantity of the living standard has also been improving, especially the air pollution. In effect, rush hour fee can do much to alleviate the polluted air. To sum up, creating this fee is the best amazing solution for many issues. for these reasons, this charge should be used commonly soon.
It is a common belief that drivers should not
be charged
when using their vehicles at the
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rush
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hour
,
even though
it brings
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many harm
to environment.
However
, I
firmly
believe that imposing
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fee
would do
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a lot of
benefits
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because
it can
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cut
the number of vehicles drives on the street and protect the environment

To
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begin
with, implementing a
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rush
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hour
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fee
would
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ease
the traffic jam, diminishing
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some of pollution
in the atmosphere. Charge will
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cut
the personal cars.
Instead
, they would opt to
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use
the
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alternatives
means of transportation. This is
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important
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because
being stuck
in traffic
also
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adds
appreciably
to the emission of pollutants,
Moreover
, enforcing a
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fee
is not
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only
simple,
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but
it works well.
For instance
, in
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some
countries, the
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government
introduced this
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fee
several years ago.
As a result
, the residents
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started
to share their car with each
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others
, walk and public transports
as well
. Going down on the number of vehicles drives on the street at
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rush
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hour
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make
the congestion, accidents in traffic
also
be down, and pollution levels have gone down
as well
.

On the top of that, Tax revenue from the
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rush
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hour
can be
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used
to fund of environmental or social projects. Prohibition can
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use
this charge for improving the green environment.
For example
,
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government
has been able to plant trees and flower alongside road or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the jungles after deforestation. Not
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only
the beauty of the landscape has
been increased
,
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but
the quantity of the living standard has
also
been improving,
especially
the air pollution. In effect,
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rush
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hour
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fee
can do much to alleviate the polluted air.

To sum up, creating this
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fee
is the best amazing solution for
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many
issues.
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for
these reasons, this charge should be
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used
commonly
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soon
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay the government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during the rush hour to help cut down on air pollution from exhausting fumes v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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