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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s word, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v.499

In today’s word, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 499
Major differences, in every single aspect of modern life, could be seen easily. Generally speaking, the life rate has increased dramatically in few decades ago, due to various kinds of inventions, such as fast vehicles, internet, smart phones and so on. So, in this situation, one might assume that all works should be done as swiftly as possible, no matter how much mistakes would happen, yet I do believe that there is an indirect relationship between life and work rate. Actually, in my opinion the nature of modern days’ works demand for doing jobs nice and slow. To begin with, doing a job precisely and spending enough time would definitely prevent further redoing or replications. To illustrate, when a job is getting done in rush, one has to rely on chances and take more risks, and ultimately not all risks end up to the expected results. Thus, it would be much wiser to take as much as time that is need and consider all the different angels of an issue in order to make the decisions based on facts, not risks on chances. Considering my boss as an example, he is a decent man and examines various aspects of every work or decision that lead him to make the best jobs. In one word, spending enough time results in better outcomes and avoid wasting time and resource just for the sake of speed. Besides, todays’ works are more complicated than before and need considerable amount of time to get done perfectly. Considering a website designer as an example, he has to put tremendous amount of energy and concentration to accomplish his goals, otherwise he would just disappoint the website users and lead in decreasing the profit. So, it is needless to say, that such this sensitive job won’t happen without spending right amount of time. The fact is, even small mistakes would reminds in consumers’ minds as the shortcomings of an specific brand or company, well the nature of sophisticated jobs is time consuming and the speed of people won’t add any value after all. To conclude, some might confuse these two different issues that our high race life needs all jobs to be done quickly and people have to accept couple of risks to gain the high rate, however, this idea could be simply opposed when we consider the real nature of todays’ jobs that are complicated and time consuming.
Major differences, in every single aspect of modern
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life
, could be
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seen
easily
.
Generally
speaking, the
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life
rate has increased
dramatically
in few decades ago, due to various kinds of inventions, such as
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fast
vehicles, internet, smart phones and
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so
on.
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So
, in this situation, one might assume that all works should
be done
as
swiftly
as possible, no matter how
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much
mistakes would happen,
yet
I do believe that there is an indirect relationship between
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life
and
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work
rate. Actually, in my opinion the nature of modern days’ works demand for doing
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jobs
nice and slow.

To
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begin
with, doing a
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job
precisely
and spending
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enough
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time
would definitely
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prevent
further
redoing or replications. To illustrate, when a
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job
is getting done in rush, one
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has to
rely on chances and take more
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risks
, and
ultimately
not all
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risks
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end
up to the
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expected
results.
Thus
, it would be much wiser to take as much as
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time
that
is need
and consider all the
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different
angels of an issue in order to
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make
the decisions based on facts, not
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risks
on chances. Considering my boss as an example, he is a decent
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man
and examines various aspects of every
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work
or decision that lead him to
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make
the best
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jobs
. In one word, spending
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enough
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time
results in better outcomes and avoid wasting
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time
and resource
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just
for the sake of speed.

Besides
,
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todays
’ works are more complicated than
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before
and need considerable amount of
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time
to
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get
done
perfectly
. Considering a website designer as an example, he
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has to
put tremendous amount of energy and concentration to accomplish his goals,
otherwise
he would
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just
disappoint the website users and lead in decreasing the profit.
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So
, it is needless to say, that such this sensitive
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job
won’t happen without spending right amount of
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time
. The fact is, even
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small
mistakes would
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reminds
in consumers’ minds as the shortcomings of
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an
specific brand or
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company
, well the nature of sophisticated
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jobs
is
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time consuming
and the speed of
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people
won’t
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add
any value
after all
.

To conclude
,
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some
might confuse these two
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different
issues that our high race
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life
needs all
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jobs
to
be done
quickly
and
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people
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have to
accept
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couple of
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risks
to gain the high rate,
however
, this
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idea
could be
simply
opposed when we consider the real nature of
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todays
’
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jobs
that
are complicated
and
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time consuming
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay In today’s word, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 499

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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