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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. v. 4
In recent years, space exploration has been a debatable issue among societies. Some people believe that investing in this industry is a waste of money and the authorities should use that money in solving problems on earth instead. Personally, I fairly disagree with this view for a number of reasons. On the one hand, people argue that the governments should not continue to fund those projects for a number of reasons. The first one is that there are still so many people are living under the line of poverty on our planet. Therefore, it seems like putting capital in space programs while thousands are dying of hunger is illogical and unreasonable. Moreover, there are many public services that need better improvement to enhance life standard for/of generations such as education, medicine, and public transportation. On the other hand, although some people are against this idea, my view is that exploring the universe benefits humanity in many aspects. First of all, it is the foundation that helps human being bring technologies to a new/greater level. Not many acknowledge that multiple products and innovations used in the daily life are results of space research. As more satellites are orbiting around the world, providing a considerable amount of information, human are able to live in the most innovative life. In addition to this, space travel also helps human understand more about their home. By watching the globe from the cosmos, people could study Earth sciences, weathers, climate change and many more, and thereby broaden their horizons. To sum up, I hold the opinion that the governments ought to allocate the budget appropriately so that both discovering life on planets and tackling problems on the Earth are arranged reasonably.
In recent years,
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space
exploration has been a debatable issue among societies.
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Some
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people
believe that investing in this industry is a waste of money and the authorities should
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use
that money in solving problems on earth
instead
.
Personally
, I
fairly
disagree with this view for a number of reasons.

On the one hand,
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people
argue that the
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governments
should not continue to fund those projects for a number of reasons. The
first
one is that there are
still
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so
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many
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people
are living under the line of poverty on our planet.
Therefore
, it seems like putting capital in
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space
programs while thousands are dying of hunger is illogical and unreasonable.
Moreover
, there are
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many
public services that need better improvement to enhance
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life
standard for/of generations such as education, medicine, and public transportation.

On the other hand
, although
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some
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people
are against this
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idea
, my view is that exploring the universe benefits humanity in
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many
aspects.
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First of all
, it is the foundation that
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helps
human being bring technologies to a new/greater level. Not
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many
acknowledge that multiple products and innovations
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used
in the daily
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life
are results of
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space
research. As more satellites are orbiting around the world, providing a considerable amount of information, human are able to
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live
in the most innovative
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life
.
In addition
to this,
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space
travel
also
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helps
human understand more about their home. By watching the globe from the cosmos,
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people
could study Earth sciences, weathers, climate
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change
and
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many
more, and thereby broaden their horizons.

To sum up, I hold the opinion that the
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governments
ought to allocate the budget
appropriately
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so
that both discovering
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life
on planets and tackling problems on the Earth
are arranged
reasonably
.
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IELTS essay The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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