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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v.3

The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v. 3
Lots of money has been spent by the government to explore life on other planets. According to some it is a waste of money and more fund should be spent on resolving the problems of the citizens. This essay will discuss it further. There is an ongoing quest to find evidence of extra-terrestrial life. Lots of fund have been put together by the ministries to explore it. In a recent article, it was published that somewhat around 80 million of the budget has been approved by the state for ISRO to explore Mars. The government aims to learn about how another life can sustain in co-existence by these expeditions. People believe that instead of identifying life in the outer space, fund should be allocated to address the problems which an individual of the country is facing. The budget could be used in developing of schools or hospitals which in turn will directly benefit the public. Report by the Times of India revealed that there is a huge shortage of medical schools in India. The capital could be used to build the infrastructure for such schools or public transports. To conclude, government main motto behind the exploration missions is to understand more about the different life that can exist. On the other hand, some people resist this decision as they think that the allocated fund could be used for more humanitarian purposes.
Lots of money has
been spent
by the
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government
to explore
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life
on other planets. According to
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some
it is a waste of money and more
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fund
should
be spent
on resolving the problems of the citizens. This essay will discuss it
further
.

There is an ongoing quest to find evidence of extra-terrestrial
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life
. Lots of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fund
have
been put
together by the ministries to explore it. In a recent article, it
was published
that somewhat around 80 million of the budget has
been approved
by the state for ISRO to explore Mars. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
aims to learn about how another
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life
can sustain in co-existence by these expeditions.

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People
believe that
instead
of identifying
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life
in the outer space,
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fund
should
be allocated
to address the problems which an individual of the country is facing. The budget could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in developing of schools or hospitals which in turn will
directly
benefit the public. Report by
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
the Times of India
revealed that there is a huge shortage of medical schools in India. The capital could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to build the infrastructure for such schools or public transports.

To conclude
,
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government
main motto behind the exploration missions is to understand more about the
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different
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life
that can exist.
On the other hand
,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
resist this decision as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the allocated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fund
could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for more humanitarian purposes.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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