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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV, why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v.2

Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV, why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v. 2
All of us have idols in someone. Normal person tries to mimic notable personalities either by reading magazines or watching TV as they idolises those people. According me, ordinary people start worshipping such celebrities and treat them like god which is a very wrong thing to do. Print media or video entertainment such as the Televisions are the best mode through which one can learn about the stars. This is the most sought methods through which an individual gathers the information about the celebrity they follow and copy. For instance, there are many entertainment programs over which paparazzi catches the celebrities off camera to illustrate their true nature. Hence, people try to follow them through these sorts of way. In the quest to be like their mentors, normal person imitates the famous personalities and in this process, they lose their original self. They are so much mesmerised by these famous people that they want their every attribute like them such as physical look or the way of talking or even the nature. For example, there are many mimic artists who almost look like a replica of the celebrity. This eventually leads to the identity loss. To conclude, the media brings out the true character of the famous person in front of the audience and ordinary people follow these media to get closer to their favourite celeb. In my opinion, this is wrong as the individual starts becoming someone else by blindly following their idols.
All of us have idols in someone. Normal person tries to mimic notable personalities either by reading magazines or watching TV as they
idolises
those
people
.
According me
, ordinary
people
start
worshipping
such
celebrities
and treat them like god which is a
very
wrong
thing to do.

Print media or video entertainment such as the Televisions are the best mode through which one can learn about the stars. This is the most sought methods through which an individual gathers the information about the
celebrity
they follow and copy.
For instance
, there are
many
entertainment programs over which paparazzi
catches
the
celebrities
off camera to illustrate their true nature.
Hence
,
people
try to follow them through these sorts of way.

In the quest to be like their mentors, normal person imitates the
famous
personalities and in this process, they lose their original self. They are
so
much
mesmerised
by these
famous
people
that they want their every attribute like them such as physical look or the way of talking or even the nature.
For example
, there are
many
mimic artists who almost look like a replica of the
celebrity
. This
eventually
leads to the identity loss.

To conclude
, the media brings out the true character of the
famous
person in front of the audience and ordinary
people
follow these media to
get
closer to their
favourite
celeb. In my opinion, this is
wrong
as the individual
starts
becoming someone else by
blindly
following their idols.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV, why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v. 2

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