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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this? v.8

People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this? v. 8
Nowadays, it is quite common to see that people tend more towards ready-made cuisines than before. The primary reason behind eating Prepacked food is busy lifestyle and this results in the occurrence of serious health hazards among masses. The main factor behind the preference of junk food is because of the hectic schedule of population these days. This is only due to the fact that many people face heavy office workload during their working hours. Consequently, after getting free from their work, they feel tired and prefer to order snaked meals online. In other words, sometimes their body does not respond them to prepare dishes at home for themselves. At that time, they chose the easiest way to get their meal ready. For example, Zomato food online home delivery services are famous among generation as they find it more convenient and get their food easily available in a single click of a button. On the other hand, eating these kinds of cuisines have some detrimental effects on human health. The market-made dishes are mostly comprised of harmful chemicals, colouring components, fats and spices, daily consumption of which leads to serious health problems. Some of these are indigestion, obesity, hypertension, cardiovascular diseases etcetera. The study of Times India revealed that 70% of students who lives away from their homes, confront problems like fat, lack of digestion and hypertension only because of regular consumption of fast foods. In conclusion, market-prepared foods are highly adopted by modern society due to their busy day-time and owing to this they face health related problems.
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tend more towards ready-made cuisines than
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before
. The primary reason behind eating Prepacked
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food
is busy lifestyle and this results in the occurrence of serious
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health
hazards among masses.

The main factor behind the preference of junk
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food
is
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because
of the hectic schedule of population these days. This is
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only
due to the fact that
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many
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people
face heavy office workload during their working hours.
Consequently
, after getting free from their work, they feel tired and prefer to order snaked meals online.
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,
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sometimes
their body does not respond them to prepare dishes at home for themselves. At that time, they chose the easiest way to
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get
their meal ready.
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Zomato
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food
online home delivery services are
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famous
among generation as they find it more convenient and
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their
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food
easily
available in a single click of a button.

On the other hand
, eating these kinds of cuisines have
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detrimental effects on human
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health
. The market-made dishes are
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mostly comprised of
harmful chemicals,
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colouring
components, fats and spices, daily consumption of which leads to serious
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health
problems.
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Some
of these are indigestion, obesity, hypertension, cardiovascular
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diseases
etcetera. The study of Times India revealed that 70% of students who
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lives
away from their homes, confront problems like
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fat
, lack of digestion and hypertension
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only
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because
of regular consumption of
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fast
foods.

In conclusion
, market-prepared
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foods
are
highly
adopted by modern society due to their busy day-time and owing to this they face
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health
related problems.
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IELTS essay People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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