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The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v.4

The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v. 4
The economic differences in the society create inequality among the people. The differences between the rich people and the poor people’s income are increasing in the recent years. The reason for them can be classified into the improper government policies and the individual's talents. Tax policies introduced by the governments are favourable for the high net worth people to evade the tax. For instance, entrepreneurs have different tax slabs that make them avail tax exemptions like, opening an office in a special economy zone can result in good savings and increase in profit. However, we cannot discount the individual talents in making enormous profits. Talent is something that can be acquired by experience or inherited from the family. There are several startup companies created by talented individuals who make it to the rich people category in a matter of few years. In addition, there are few interesting people from the wealthy segment who use their talents to bridge the income gap between the rich and poor. For example, the companies like Microsoft and Google are spending the hard earned money for the betterment of the society by investing in child education and infrastructure. If all the organisations and the individuals spend a fraction of their enormous income in the country's infrastructure, education and economic growth, then there are bright chances to fill in the gap of the income difference. I firmly believe that rich people spending the money on improving the lifestyle of poor people and better government tax policies will increase the chances of closing the income difference between the rich and poor.
The economic differences in the society create inequality among the
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people
. The differences between the
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rich
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people
and the poor
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people’s
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income
are increasing in the recent years.
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The
reason for them can
be classified
into the improper
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government
policies and the individual's talents.

Tax policies introduced by the
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governments
are
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favourable
for the high net worth
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people
to evade the
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tax
.
For instance
, entrepreneurs have
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different
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tax
slabs that
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make
them avail
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tax
exemptions like, opening an office in a special economy zone can result in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
savings and increase in profit.
However
, we cannot discount the individual talents in making enormous profits.

Talent is something that can
be acquired
by experience or inherited from the family. There are several startup
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companies
created by talented individuals who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it to the
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rich
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people
category in a matter of few years.
In addition
, there are few interesting
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people
from the wealthy segment who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their talents to bridge the
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income
gap between the
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rich
and poor.

For example
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
like Microsoft and Google are spending the
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hard earned
money for the betterment of the society by investing in child education and infrastructure. If all the
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
and the individuals spend a fraction of their enormous
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income
in the country's infrastructure, education and economic growth, then there are bright chances to fill in the gap of the
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income
difference.

I
firmly
believe that
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rich
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people
spending the money on improving the lifestyle of poor
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people
and better
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government
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tax
policies will increase the chances of closing the
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income
difference between the
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rich
and poor.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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