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The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v.1

The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v. 1
There is no doubt that the gap present clearly today between the poor and the rich is getting wider by time and is affecting our way of life. That was only observed in the past in some communities where the wealth of a country was restricted to a few powerful and connected people. They used to own more than eighty percent of the resources and income, while the rest is barely enough for the common people. Nowadays, the difference is significant but not limited to the societies finest. The society is divided into groups, the rich, the poor and the few managing to enjoy some of the rich benefits but struggling to keep this level, they are bouncing between the limits of each of the other groups. As a result of today's situation, a broadband of the poor are striving to get a fair share of prosperity with no actual hope, the fabric of the society is getting weaker and therefore each group is more colonised to itself forming new habits and customs. Bridging this gap can only be done if equality was achieved in the basic needs like education and healthcare. If an acceptable ease was managed for the common people in their daily routines like public transportations and business facilities, that would also be helpful. There must be transparent laws to manage the use of the wealth and the equality of sharing it and monitor any possible corruption. The sense of equal opportunity has to be delivered and believed by all people. Briefly, no community can prosper and evolve safely unless the gaps are bridged between people at all aspects giving a fair chance to everyone to live in comfort if they worked reasonably hard to achieve it.
There is no doubt that the gap present
clearly
today
between the poor and the rich is getting wider by time and is affecting our way of life.

That was
only
observed in the past in
some
communities where the wealth of a country
was restricted
to a few powerful and connected
people
. They
used
to
own
more than eighty percent of the resources and income, while the rest is
barely
enough
for the common
people
. Nowadays, the difference is significant
but
not limited to the societies finest. The society
is divided
into groups, the rich, the poor and the few managing to enjoy
some of the
rich benefits
but
struggling to
keep
this level, they are bouncing between the limits of each of the other groups.

As a result
of
today
's situation, a broadband of the poor are striving to
get
a
fair
share of prosperity with no actual hope, the fabric of the society is getting weaker and
therefore
each group is more
colonised
to itself forming new habits and customs. Bridging this gap can
only
be done
if equality
was achieved
in the basic needs like education and healthcare. If an acceptable
ease
was managed
for the common
people
in their daily routines like public transportations and business facilities, that would
also
be helpful. There
must
be transparent laws to manage the
use
of the wealth and the equality of sharing it and monitor any possible corruption. The sense of equal opportunity
has to
be delivered
and believed by all
people
.

Briefly
, no community can prosper and evolve
safely
unless the gaps
are bridged
between
people
at all aspects giving a
fair
chance to everyone to
live
in comfort if they worked
reasonably
hard
to achieve it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich is becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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