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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 5
Using cars as a mean of transportation is becoming increasingly popular all around the world. It is widely believed that other modes of transportation need to be promoted and international and global laws and rules should be imposed to take a control over owning and utilizing the cars. I strongly agree with that statement by considering the harmful effects that have been occurred due to rising number of private cars. Therefore, this essay will discuss the potential negative impacts that have been caused due to cars and the way how above said measure can be tackled this problem. To begin with, an elevating amount of cars in the road could lead to pose a threat to the environment in many ways. One of the glaring issues is carbon emission due to fuel burning. There is a positive correlation between number of cars and amount of carbon particles in the surrounding. Subsequently, it produces the vast amount of greenhouse gases, which ultimately raise the global temperature. As a result, all the human beings and animals in the world has been suffering from high temperature in various ways, such as bushfire, volcanic eruption and sea level rise. Apart from the environmental problem, at present, health of the people markedly deteriorates because of the poor air quality. This enormously puts the burden to the government for investing huge amounts of money into health sector in order to meet the people’s needs, thus leading less investment into the country’s economic sector. Having said that, this above suggested new measure is one of the best ways to control the negative effects associated with the car usage. For example, if the public transport is well developed and accomadate the needs of people, then they would choose to commute through the buses or trains instead of cars, thus would decline the number of cars in the roads. Further, international laws, such as imposing heavy taxes, should be introduced to reduce purchasing of cars as well as its usage. Also, fuel price needs to be increased globally in order to prevent the people from using cars unnecessarily. On the whole, this two notions would able to control the private cars usage to a certain extent. In conclusion, while it is certainly true that cars are one of the necessities for people who are living in today world, it is inevitable that it should be controlled given consideration to the damages it has been causing. Therefore, I strongly agree that above said measures should be taken to effectively tackle this problem.
Using
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cars
as a mean of transportation is becoming
increasingly
popular all around the world. It is
widely
believed that other modes of transportation
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need
to
be promoted
and international and global laws and
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rules
should
be imposed
to take a control over owning and utilizing the
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cars
. I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with that statement by considering the harmful effects that have
been occurred
due to rising number of private
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cars
.
Therefore
, this essay will discuss the potential
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negative
impacts that have
been caused
due to
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cars
and the
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way
how above said measure can
be tackled
this problem.

To
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begin
with, an elevating
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amount
of
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cars
in the road could lead to pose a threat to the environment in
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many
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ways
. One of the glaring issues is carbon emission due to fuel burning. There is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
correlation between number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
and
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amount
of carbon particles in the surrounding.
Subsequently
, it produces the vast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
of greenhouse gases, which
ultimately
raise the global temperature.
As a result
, all the human beings and animals in the world has been suffering from high temperature in various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
, such as bushfire, volcanic eruption and sea level rise. Apart from the environmental problem, at present, health of the
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people
markedly
deteriorates
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because
of the poor air quality. This
enormously
puts the burden to the
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government
for investing huge
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amounts
of money into health sector in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the
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people’s
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needs
,
thus
leading less investment into the country’s economic sector.

Having said that, this above suggested new measure is one of the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
to control the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects associated with the
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car
usage.
For example
, if the public transport is
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well developed
and
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accomadate
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
of
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people
, then they would choose to commute through the buses or trains
instead
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
,
thus
would decline the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in the roads.
Further
, international laws, such as imposing heavy taxes, should
be introduced
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
purchasing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
as well
as its usage.
Also
, fuel price
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needs
to
be increased
globally in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from using
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cars
unnecessarily
.
On the whole
, this two notions
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would able
to control the private
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cars
usage to a certain extent.

In conclusion
, while it is
certainly
true that
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cars
are one of the necessities for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are living in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
world, it is inevitable that it should
be controlled
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
consideration to the damages it has been causing.
Therefore
, I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that above said measures should
be taken
to
effectively
tackle this problem.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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