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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v.26

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 26
Modern growth is almost impossible without motorised transportation and people are to move so frequently that they always want to own cars. In fact, transit has become one of the most important parts and parcels of our lives. As the figure of population is increasing day by day, so do their demands and needs of modern shipping facilities and that is why the figure of vehicles has increased rapidly all over the world. However, for the last few years, breath infection has reached an intolerable level and it is the motorised vehicles that have been creating this acute issue with other factors. Currently, almost 58 million vehicles are running alone on the roads of Britain and every day this number will increase geometrically. In fact, the trouble began with the rapid development and growth of the cities and because of the increasing demand of people and it is badly needed to control it for our own benefits. It is true that with the development of the civilisation, the number of cars has increased on the streets and resulting air pollution, accidents, scarcity of fuels, sound pollution, and so on. But we cannot avoid or cut off cars from our activity overnight because life today has become hasty enough to routine work, office jobs, travelling, holiday activities, amusement etc. And without cars, it would be more troublesome. Therefore I believe that it is important to control the value of cars and to introduce an alternative form of the transit system as well. Increasing the price of the fuel might be a solution as it will discourage people to drive cars so frequently and for those who are settling their mind to buy a new jeep. Cars emit Carbon dioxide, Carbon-Mono-Oxide and other harmful chemicals which are dangerous for the environment as well as for public health. To reduce the use of cars, we can introduce some alternative transit systems like the underground railway, city coach service, train service, subtle train etc. If the transports are easily available and comfortable, people will be encouraged to use those to reduce the cost of owning private cars. Some non-motorized vehicles such as bicycles and rickshaws can be the substitute for the motorised vehicles. Once people are aware of the effects of global warming and breath infection, they will definitely need those forms of transportations for their own betterment. Those vehicles are environment-friendly and in some countries, people have already started using bicycles instead of cars, for example, China. If we can introduce river-based cheap and user-friendly transports and try to make them a favourite among people, then it will be definitely helpful for the environment. This type of river-based transportation system has been already introduced in countries like Brazil. On the other hand, introducing a new law to regulate car ownership is also important. If there were an existing rule that any family cannot buy more than one car, the rapid increase of the car could have been controlled. Besides, the government should introduce a heavy tax on purchasing cars. In summary, increasing use of cars and fuels is an acute problem for all of us. This problem can only be solved by introducing a new form of cheap and comfortable transports and by enforcing and introducing new strict laws. Otherwise, life in cities will become tougher with traffic jam and serious air pollution.
Modern growth is almost impossible without
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motorised
transportation and
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people
are to
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move
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so
frequently
that they always want to
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own
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cars
. In fact, transit has become one of the most
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important
parts and parcels of our
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lives
. As the figure of population is
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increasing
day by day,
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so
do their demands and needs of modern shipping facilities and
that is
why the figure of
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vehicles
has increased
rapidly
all over the world.
However
, for the last few years, breath infection has reached an intolerable level and it is the
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motorised
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vehicles
that have been creating this acute issue with other factors.
Currently
, almost 58 million
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vehicles
are running alone on the roads of Britain and every day this number will increase
geometrically
. In fact, the trouble began with the rapid development and growth of the cities and
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because
of the
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increasing
demand of
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people
and it is
badly
needed to control it for our
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own
benefits.

It is true that with the development of the
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civilisation
, the number of
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cars
has increased on the streets and resulting air pollution, accidents, scarcity of fuels, sound pollution, and
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so
on.
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But
we cannot avoid or
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cut
off
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cars
from our activity overnight
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because
life
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today
has become hasty
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enough
to routine work, office jobs, travelling, holiday activities, amusement etc. And without
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cars
, it would be more troublesome.
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Therefore
I believe that it is
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important
to control the value of
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cars
and to
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introduce
an alternative form of the transit system
as well
.
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Increasing
the price of the fuel might be a solution as it will discourage
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people
to drive
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cars
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
frequently
and for those who are settling their mind to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a
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new
jeep.
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Cars
emit Carbon dioxide, Carbon-Mono-Oxide and other harmful chemicals which are
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dangerous
for the environment
as well
as for public health.

To
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reduce
the
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use
of
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cars
, we can
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introduce
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some
alternative transit systems like the underground railway, city coach service, train service, subtle train etc. If the transports are
easily
available and comfortable,
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people
will
be encouraged
to
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use
those to
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reduce
the cost of owning private
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cars
.
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Some
non-motorized
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vehicles
such as bicycles and rickshaws can be the substitute for the
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motorised
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vehicles
. Once
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people
are aware of the effects of global warming and breath infection, they will definitely need those forms of transportations for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
betterment. Those
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vehicles
are environment-friendly and in
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some
countries,
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people
have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
using bicycles
instead
of
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cars
,
for example
, China. If we can
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introduce
river-based
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and user-friendly transports and try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them a
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favourite
among
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people
, then it will be definitely helpful for the environment. This type of river-based transportation system has been already introduced in countries like Brazil.

On the other hand
, introducing a
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new
law to regulate
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car
ownership is
also
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important
. If there were an existing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
that any family cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
more than one
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car
, the rapid increase of the
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car
could have
been controlled
.
Besides
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
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introduce
a heavy tax on purchasing cars.

In summary,
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increasing
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use
of
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cars
and fuels is an acute problem for all of us. This problem can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be solved
by introducing a
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new
form of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and comfortable transports and by enforcing and introducing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
strict laws.
Otherwise
, life in cities will become tougher with traffic jam and serious air pollution.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 26

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
560 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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