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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.24

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 24
Some people believe that other means of transportation should be increased and global law should be imposed on car ownership and use. However, in my opinion, to heal the environment and to reduce toxicity in atmosphere, various ways of public transport should be adopted. In this essay, I will propose possible examples for the same. To begin with, these days, traffic is one of the major issues which causes hindrance to travel, due to the enormous number of cars congestion occurs on narrow roads. In other words, introducing others ways to travel will definitely improve the situation and will also help to regulate the proper ownership of cars. for example, in my city, metro train was lunched and a significant number of cars were less seen on the road, that means people adopted public transport which is cheaper and more liable. Moreover, it provides space on the road for other crucial purposes such as firefighters and ambulance. Secondly, reducing the number of cars will surely help control pollution, as global warming is an alarming threat, people should take steps to control emissions. Engagement in mass transport will decrease pollution substantially. For instance, in a study, it was found that countries who are implementing public transport ways showed a 30 percent fall of pollution levels. further, people also saved money with the use of common transport. To encapsulate, to reduce the pollution and to have less occupied streets a switch is needed which will be beneficial for everyone. I totally agree with the statement that different ways of transportation should be encouraged so that our future generation can also leave a peaceful and pleasant life.
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. In this essay, I will propose possible examples for the same.

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cars
congestion occurs on narrow roads. In
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to travel will definitely
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to regulate the proper ownership of
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example, in my city, metro train
was lunched
and a significant number of
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cars
were less
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seen
on the road, that means
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people
adopted public
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transport
which is cheaper and more liable.
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crucial purposes such as firefighters and ambulance.

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cars
will
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help
control
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pollution
, as global warming is an alarming threat,
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people
should take steps to control emissions. Engagement in mass
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transport
will decrease
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pollution
substantially
.
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, in a study, it
was found
that countries who are implementing public
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transport
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ways
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showed
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levels.
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further
,
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people
also
saved money with the
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use
of common transport.

To encapsulate, to
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reduce
the
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pollution
and to have less occupied streets a switch
is needed
which will be beneficial for everyone. I
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different
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ways
of transportation should
be encouraged
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that our future generation can
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leave
a peaceful and pleasant life.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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