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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.18

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 18
Since 1888, cars drive on British streets and in 2000 we already had 29 million vehicles in Britain. Some people think, that alternative transportation forms should be encouraged and vehicle and it would be good to control ownership and use by international laws. This essay agrees with this approach and wants to point out some reasons. First of all, using less cars and going by bike or foot will enhance our health. People often use their vehicle for short distances which can easily be used for physical activity. For instance, I know dwellers of suburbs which could easily use their bikes for their daily way to work, but it is way more comfortable to drive by car, so they choose taking that. Nowadays, we sit all day it would enhance our health when we would just use our feet to go to work. If the government would use vehicle usage controls, most people would start to ride their bike more often because mostly, it is easy to do it. The second reason is the protection of our environment. Car emissions produce a lot of CO2 and furthers climate change. Most of the time, people don’t take public transportation like bus or train, which would be much more sustainable, because it is very expensive. For example, the one-way train between Graz and Linz costs 40 euros. That’s why many students borrow their parent’s car, even if sustainability is important for them, because it is much cheaper. Encouraging public transportation by making them cheaper would motivate people to use them more often and protect our environment. To conclude, furthering alternative forms of transportation would enhance human’s health and the environment. Often, people are just too lazy to use their bike, which can be counteracted by controlling the use of vehicles. Moreover, making public transportation cheaper would be a great incentive for a higher use of them.
Since 1888,
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cars
drive on British streets and in 2000 we already had 29 million
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vehicles
in Britain.
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Some
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people
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think
, that alternative
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transportation
forms should
be encouraged
and
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vehicle
and it would be
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good
to control ownership and
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use
by international laws. This essay
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agrees
with this approach and wants to point out
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some
reasons.

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First of all
, using
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less
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cars
and going by
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bike
or foot will enhance our health.
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People
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often
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use
their
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vehicle
for short distances which can
easily
be
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used
for physical activity.
For instance
, I know dwellers of suburbs which could
easily
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use
their
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bikes
for their daily way to work,
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but
it is way more comfortable to drive by
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car
,
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so
they choose taking that. Nowadays, we sit all day it would enhance our health when we would
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just
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use
our feet to go to work. If the
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government
would
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use
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vehicle
usage controls, most
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people
would
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start
to ride their
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bike
more
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often
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because
mostly
, it is easy to do it.

The second reason is the protection of our environment.
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Car
emissions produce
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a lot of
CO2 and furthers climate
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change
. Most of the time,
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people
don’t take public
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transportation
like bus or train, which would be much more sustainable,
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because
it is
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very
expensive.
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, the one-way train between Graz and Linz costs 40 euros. That’s why
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many
students borrow their parent’s
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car
, even if sustainability is
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important
for them,
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because
it is much cheaper. Encouraging public
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transportation
by making them cheaper would motivate
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people
to
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use
them more
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often
and protect our environment.

To conclude
, furthering alternative forms of
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transportation
would enhance human’s health and the environment.
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Often
,
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people
are
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just
too lazy to
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use
their
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bike
, which can
be counteracted
by controlling the
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use
of
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vehicles
.
Moreover
, making public
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transportation
cheaper would be a great incentive for a higher
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use
of them.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages knows nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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