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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v.1

Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v. 1
It is believed that the travelling and the relocating rate of people is higher than ever, while this higher of journey effect of the behaviour. The following essay will be examined the factors which affect the situation and several opinions on the outcome from this behaviour. Numerous studies have consistently found that there are various reasons why travelling activities have increased significantly in the past recent years. Firstly, travellers intensively due to the existence of low-cost airlines. It is a fact that airlines companies such as Air Asia or Nok Air are providing affordable and economic tickets, therefore, people from various incomes could purchase it. Secondly, many companies have increased their overseas projects due to the globalization. As a result of this, their employees have to do excessive business trips to other continents or other peninsulas. Thirdly, as business competition gets more tension each day, the stress levels of the workers have risen. Consequently, the number of who travelling and relocate activities have climbed dramatically in the past few years. In my opinions, from this travel and relocate behaviour, it leads to another outcome, they will have the chance to learn a new culture. For instance, many Thais have visited India, then they explored the ancient culture and the various types of food among the parts of countries. Travelling also helps people to decreasing their stress. Most of people who live in the metropolis have more chance to get stress higher than those who don’t, taking to trip will help them to unwind. To sum up, it is true that many reasons lead to the higher rate of travel and relocation. The low fare of tickets, business trips and stress are the main reasons of this situation, however, many people get benefits from these activities.
It
is believed
that the
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travelling
and the relocating rate of
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people
is higher than ever, while this higher of journey effect of the
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behaviour
. The following essay will
be examined
the factors which affect the situation and several opinions on the outcome from this
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behaviour
.

Numerous studies have
consistently
found that there are various reasons why
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travelling
activities have increased
significantly
in the past recent years.
Firstly
,
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travellers
intensively
due to the existence of low-cost airlines. It is a fact that airlines
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companies
such as Air Asia or
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Nok
Air are providing affordable and economic tickets,
therefore
,
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people
from various incomes could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it.
Secondly
,
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many
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companies
have increased their overseas projects due to the globalization.
As a result
of this, their employees
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have to
do excessive business trips to other continents or other peninsulas.
Thirdly
, as business competition
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gets
more tension each day, the
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stress
levels of the workers have risen.
Consequently
, the number of who
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travelling
and relocate activities have climbed
dramatically
in the past few years.

In my opinions, from this travel and relocate
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behaviour
, it leads to another outcome, they will have the chance to learn a new culture.
For instance
,
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many
Thais have visited India, then they explored the ancient culture and the various types of food among the parts of countries.
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Travelling
also
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helps
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people
to decreasing their
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stress
. Most of
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people
who
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live
in the metropolis have more chance to
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get
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stress
higher than those who don’t, taking to trip will
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help
them to unwind.

To sum up, it is true that
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many
reasons lead to the higher rate of travel and relocation. The low fare of tickets, business trips and
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stress
are the main reasons of this situation,
however
,
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many
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
benefits from these activities.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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