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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.14

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 14
The use of cars has drastically increased over the last century. Globally and in Britain alone, there are currently millions of motor vehicles on the street. While cars remain the most popular form of transport, I strongly agree that there should be alternative forms of transport and policies to control car ownership and use. I will present my opinion in the following paragraphs. Many people argue that the invention of cars has provided a quick and easy way for people to go from point A to point B. Compared to public transport, for example, the tram, which has many stops along its route, car drivers can reach their destination without having to go through unnecessary stops. Cars are more comfortable, with comfy seats and a stereo system, not to mention the fact that car users do not have to share their ride with strangers unless they choose to do so. However, the huge increase in the number of cars on the street has caused several major concerns including issues with congestion as well as air and noise pollution. In metropolitan areas, congestion occurs almost daily. The more cars there are, the more traffic jams we have to endure. Apart from congestion, the exhaust gas produced from millions of cars has contributed to many environmental problems. In addition, the beeping and honking and loud engine noise from big trucks are generating more noise pollution. In conclusion, the problems associated with the increase in car use are believed to outweigh the benefits of owning a car. Therefore, alternative forms of transport such as trains and trams should be encouraged to help reduce carr ownership and
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increased over the last century. Globally and in Britain alone, there are
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millions of motor vehicles on the street. While
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remain the most popular form of
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, I
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agree
that there should be alternative forms of
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and policies to control
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ownership and
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. I will present my opinion in the following paragraphs.

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argue that the invention of
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cars
has provided a quick and easy way for
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people
to go from point A to point B. Compared to public
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transport
,
for example
, the tram, which has
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many
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stops
along its route,
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drivers can reach their destination without having to go through unnecessary
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stops
.
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Cars
are more comfortable, with comfy seats and a stereo system, not to mention the fact that
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car
users do not
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share their ride with strangers unless they choose to do
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.

However
, the huge increase in the number of
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cars
on the street has caused several major concerns including issues with congestion
as well
as air and noise pollution. In metropolitan areas, congestion occurs almost daily. The more
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cars
there are, the more traffic jams we
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have to
endure. Apart from congestion, the exhaust gas produced from millions of
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cars
has contributed to
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many
environmental problems.
In addition
, the beeping and honking and loud engine noise from
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big
trucks are generating more noise pollution.

In conclusion
, the problems associated with the increase in
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car
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use
are believed
to outweigh the benefits of owning a
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car
.
Therefore
, alternative forms of
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transport
such as trains and trams should
be encouraged
to
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help
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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