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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.12

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 12
Some people opine that animals deserve the same status as humans and that they should not be abused by people. However, it is argued that the animals must be used by humans for their multifarious needs including food and research. This essay will examine both views and outline my opinion. Firstly, humans are the most privileged species existing on earth. It is proven by the fact they have the voice and choice to express their feelings and needs. They enjoy most of the rights which other kinds might not have the ability to exercise. Taking this ability for granted, humans take undue advantage and exercise their power on these speechless creatures. Secondly, animals are also living beings, but they can’t voice their opinions or needs. This doesn’t mean that they do not have feelings. It’s just that their medium of expression is different than humans. Just as a coin has two sides, this argument is no exception. Human is considered as a selfish species who does a lot of things for his own benefit. For instance, dog is considered as the man’s best friend. So, many people love to keep them as pets in order to be safe and secure. Another good example for this is proven by people who eat non vegetarian food. Every alternate person loves to eat chicken, mutton or sea food without a single thought of mercy going into their mind. The love for such foods increases the demand in the food market which eventually accentuates the exploitation of animals. Similarly, these innocent creatures are also used for research purposes by many humans. Because of such studies, animals are abused to a large extent. In my opinion, one should be kind to every kind. Just as humans wish to be free, animals also love moving around freely and not being caged or abused for any selfish purposes of humans. In a nutshell, I conclude saying that animals possess equal rights as that of humans. They should have the liberty to enjoy as much as we do.
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opine that
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animals
deserve the same status as
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humans
and that they should not
be abused
by
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people
.
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, it
is argued
that the
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animals
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must
be
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used
by
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humans
for their multifarious needs including
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food
and research. This essay will examine both views and outline my opinion.

Firstly
,
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humans
are the most privileged species existing on earth. It
is proven
by the fact they have the voice and choice to express their feelings and needs. They enjoy most of the rights which other kinds might not have the ability to exercise. Taking this ability for granted,
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humans
take undue advantage and exercise their power on these speechless creatures.
Secondly
,
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animals
are
also
living beings,
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but
they can’t voice their opinions or needs. This doesn’t mean that they do not have feelings. It’s
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just
that their medium of expression is
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than
humans.

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as a coin has two sides, this argument is no exception.
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is considered
as a selfish species who does
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a lot of
things for his
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own
benefit.
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, dog
is considered
as the
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man
’s best friend.
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,
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many
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people
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love
to
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keep
them as pets in order to be safe and secure. Another
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good
example for this
is proven
by
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people
who eat
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non vegetarian
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food
. Every alternate person
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loves
to eat chicken, mutton or sea
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food
without a single
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thought
of mercy going into their mind. The
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love
for such
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foods
increases the demand in the
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food
market which
eventually
accentuates the exploitation of
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animals
.
Similarly
, these innocent creatures are
also
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used
for research purposes by
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many
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humans
.
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Because
of such studies,
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animals
are abused
to a large extent.

In my opinion, one should be kind to every kind.
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Just
as
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humans
wish to be free,
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animals
also
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love
moving around
freely
and not
being caged
or abused for any selfish purposes of humans.

In a nutshell, I conclude saying that
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animals
possess equal rights as that of
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humans
. They should have the liberty to enjoy as much as we do.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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