Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Present a written argument or case study to an educational reader with no specialised knowledge of the following topic: The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. To what extent do you support or oppose the idea? v.1

Present a written argument or case study to an educational reader with no specialised knowledge of the following topic: The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. v. 1
Natural resources are disappearing because of overusing. For that, I fully agree with the government should discourage people to overuse of these resources. We are lucky to live in the world of rich natural resources. Because of this, people can enjoy a comfortable lifestyle. For example, many products are made from trees, jewelleries are made from gold, silver, platinum. I love seeing new products every day, but I also know that resources are less because of over producing. And I do not think that we need that many. I love my country and my hometown because of fresh air and a lot of trees. I am really sad to see forests are disappearing in my country because trees are used for making new products, like new furniture. Government can help this problem by giving rules how to use these resources. For example, companies can only cut an amount of trees in a year, or they need to grow a number of trees for replacing the cut ones. I am happy to see people use fewer plastic bags in supermarkets because there is a price for using, which discourages people to overuse them. This would be much better for the environment, and for the future. I love when my youngest daughter, who is three years old, come home and tell me about recycling garbage. This is one of examples of government rules to encourage people to use less products to save natural resources. I want a future where my daughters can enjoy the environment, the fresh air, the beach, the forest like I can. For that, it is important to save natural resources. We can only do that by using these for what we need. I wish there are more rules for people to not overuse natural resources. My daughters are the most important things in the world for me. I want the best future for them and I want them to be able to enjoy the natural resources like I can now.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Natural
resources are disappearing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of overusing. For that, I
fully
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should discourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to overuse of these resources.

We are lucky to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the world of rich
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources.
Because of this
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can enjoy a comfortable lifestyle.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are made
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
jewelleries
are made
from gold, silver, platinum. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
seeing new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
every day,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
also
know that resources are less
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of over producing. And I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that we need that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
my country and my hometown
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of fresh air and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
. I am
really
sad to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
forests are disappearing in my country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for making new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, like new furniture.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
this problem by giving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
these resources.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
an amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
in a year, or they need to grow a number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
for replacing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
ones. I am happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
fewer plastic bags in supermarkets
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there is a price for using, which discourages
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to overuse them. This would be much better for the environment, and for the future.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
when my youngest daughter, who is three years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
home and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me about recycling garbage. This is one of examples of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
to encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun products is countable.
less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
to save
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources. I want a future where my daughters can enjoy the environment, the fresh air, the beach, the forest like I can. For that, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to save
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do that by using these for what we need.

I wish there are more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to not overuse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources. My daughters are the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
things in the world for me. I want the best future for them and I want them to be able to enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources like I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Present a written argument or case study to an educational reader with no specialised knowledge of the following topic: The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
332 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts