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The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity
It is quite a debatable issue on how to judge the performance of any person. Nowadays there is not only a single method to assess student performance. So some people argue that only final examinations are a good way to evaluate. They also believe continual assessment like a class presentation, projects are not beneficial for results. I partially agree with this statement because there are several reasons for it. I will elaborate it in the next following paragraphs of this essay. First of all, formal examination helps the tutors to check the ability of students. How much they learn or remember whatever is taught them to throughout the year. This method helps teachers to improve the performance of learners. Apart from that, the official appraisal has always done under proper supervision. Therefore, there is no chance of cheating. As a result of it, these exams enables them to perform better in the final examination. Along with this, they get a good grade in the class. On the flip side, casual evaluation such as course work, class activities, assignments and so on is also important to examine that which student is best in class. For example, if a student performs well during the whole year and he or she has a lot of practical knowledge, then, a teacher cannot ignore this factor when they assess his or her performance. Moreover, only theoretical information has no benefits if the student does not have confidence as well as practical knowledge about their work. Practical work enables juveniles to learn a topic deeply so that they can reach a peak of glory in their lives. To conclude, According to my point of view, both examinations have their own value, students cannot be judged by only one method. Tutors should use both types of exams including formal examination and projects. I believe, children should be capable of performing in both formal and informal exams.
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of any person. Nowadays there is not
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performance
.
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believe continual assessment like a
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examination
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helps
the tutors to
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check
the ability of
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students
. How much they learn or remember whatever
is taught
them to throughout the year. This method
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helps
teachers to
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improve
the
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performance
of learners. Apart from that, the official appraisal has always done under proper supervision.
Therefore
, there is no chance of cheating.
As a result
of it, these exams enables them to perform better in the final
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examination
. Along with this, they
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get
a
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good
grade in the
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class
.

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class
activities, assignments and
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on is
also
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important
to examine that which
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student
is best in
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class
.
For example
, if a
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student
performs well during the whole
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year and
he or she has
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a lot of
practical knowledge, then, a teacher cannot
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ignore
this factor when they assess
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his or her
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performance
.
Moreover
,
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only
theoretical information has no benefits if the
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student
does not have confidence
as well
as practical knowledge about their work. Practical work enables juveniles to learn a topic
deeply
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so
that they can reach a peak of glory in their
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lives
.

To conclude
, According to my point of view, both
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examinations
have their
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own
value,
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students
cannot
be judged
by
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only
one method. Tutors should
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use
both types of exams including formal
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examination
and projects. I believe, children should be capable of performing in both formal and informal exams.
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IELTS essay The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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